Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Старайтесь давать более чёткую и краткую структуру ответа: начните с прямого утверждения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных детали. Избегайте лишних заполнителей («uh», «actually», «so I was»). Также используйте более подходящие глаголы и выражения (например, "ride a bike" вместо "drive a bike").

예시: Yes, I did. I loved riding my bike as a child because my father taught me when I was six. I practiced every weekend for months to build confidence, and soon I could ride long distances around my neighborhood.

제안: Уменьшите количество пауз и слов-паразитов, формулируйте чёткое мнение в первом предложении, затем приведите 1–2 конкретные причины с примерами. Используйте правильную форму множественного числа и подходящие словосочетания (например, "bicycles are not as popular", "people prefer cars", "lack of cycling infrastructure").

예시: No, bicycles are not very popular in my city. Most people prefer cars because the roads are not safe for cycling and there are few bike lanes, so cycling is uncommon except for leisure on weekends.

× Uh, yes, I had actually, I was fond of riding a bike a lot.

✓ Uh, yes, I did actually; I was very fond of riding a bike.

The student used 'I had actually' which is incorrect for stating a past habit or experience; the auxiliary 'did' is used for emphasis or short answers in past tense. Use 'I was fond of' to describe past preference. Suggestion: use 'I did' for emphasis and avoid placing 'actually' between auxiliary and main clause; also 'very' clarifies intensity.

× My father taught me how to drive a bike and I was practicing a lot for a long time, so I was.

✓ My father taught me how to ride a bike, and I practiced a lot for a long time.

'Drive a bike' is incorrect collocation; 'ride a bike' is standard. 'I was practicing' (past continuous) is awkward with 'for a long time' when describing a completed habitual action; simple past 'I practiced' is more appropriate. The trailing 'so I was' is incomplete and should be removed.

× Uh, actually bike is not so, uh, actually bike is not as popular as uh, another transport

✓ Uh, actually bikes are not as popular as other modes of transport,

Countable noun 'bike' requires plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. 'Another transport' is unidiomatic; use 'other modes of transport' or 'other forms of transport.' Also use plural agreement 'are' with 'bikes.'

× In my city, people are used to driving cars mostly they are not into umm, active lifestyle, so they try to be more uh.

✓ In my city, people are mostly used to driving cars; they are not into an active lifestyle, so they tend to be less active.

Placement of 'mostly' was awkward; move it before 'used to.' 'Into umm, active lifestyle' needs the article 'an' before 'active lifestyle.' 'Try to be more' conflicts with intended meaning; 'tend to be less active' expresses that people are not active. Use a semicolon or break into two sentences to avoid a run-on.