Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap doğal fakat tekrarlamalar ve dolgu kelimeleri azaltılmalı; daha net bir konu cümlesi kurulmalı ve destekleyici detaylar bağlaçlarla düzenlenmeli. Örneğin gereksiz tekrarları (“I had, I had”) kaldırın, “actually” ve “uh” gibi dolgu ifadelerini sınırlandırın ve kısa bağlantı ifadeleri kullanarak (for example, so, and) neden/sonuç/ayrıntı verin. Ayrıca “improve ourselves” ifadesini hangi konuda geliştirdiğinizi belirterek somutlaştırın (ör. dayanıklılık, hız).

예시: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My friends and I often organized bicycle tours to build endurance and practice for local races. For example, we would ride 20 kilometres every weekend to improve our speed and teamwork.

제안: Cevap açık ama dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimi güçlendirilmeli; karşılaştırma yaparken daha akıcı ve düzgün cümle yapıları kullanın. “When we compared to” yerine “compared to” veya “when compared with” kullanın; “not very enhanced in this topic” yerine daha uygun ifadeler (e.g. “not well developed” veya “cycling infrastructure is limited”) tercih edin. Ayrıca gerekirse kısa sebep gösterin (ör. yolların güvenliği, altyapı eksikliği). Dolgu seslerini ve gereksiz sonlandırma ifadelerini çıkarın.

예시: I don't think bicycles are as popular in my country as they are in many European countries. Compared to Europe, cycling infrastructure here is limited and roads are often unsafe for cyclists, so most people prefer cars or public transport.

× like everybody I had, I had a bike when I was a child

✓ like everybody, I had a bike when I was a child

Comma needed for clarity; not a plural error but punctuation reduces ambiguity. Use a comma after introductory phrase 'like everybody' to separate it from the main clause. Improve by pausing briefly when speaking and including the comma in writing.

× with my friends we were organizing some bicycle tours in order to improve ourselves and participate to, uh, races

✓ with my friends we organized some bicycle tours in order to improve ourselves and participate in races

Use past simple 'organized' instead of past continuous 'were organizing' to match a habitual activity in the past. Also use the correct preposition 'participate in' rather than 'participate to'. Suggestion: use past simple for repeated past actions and learn common verb+preposition collocations (participate in).

× To be honest, I don't think that bikes are popular in my country when we compared to the European countries, our uh, country is not very uh, enhanced in this topic, so.

✓ To be honest, I don't think that bikes are popular in my country compared to European countries; our country is not very developed in this area.

Multiple issues: 'when we compared to' is incorrect — use 'compared to' (no 'when' and no passive). 'Enhanced in this topic' is unnatural; use 'developed in this area'. Also sentence structure is awkward; split into two clauses or use a semicolon. Suggestion: remove filler words, use 'compared to European countries' and choose natural adjective 'developed' and noun 'area'.