Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify tense and vocabulary, reduce errors and be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct incorrect words ("brothel" → "brother's" or "favorite"; "write" → "ride"). Keep answer to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a black bicycle that belonged to my brother and I used it when I was about four or five. I learned to ride it in the park near our home, and I remember practicing every afternoon until I felt confident.

제안: Give a clear direct opinion sentence followed by one or two specific reasons, using linking words for coherence. Correct grammar (e.g., "yes, they are popular"; "people buy them"; "the government provides"), avoid repetition and informal fillers.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country. For example, many people buy bicycles for short trips along the beach, and the government has also provided public rental bikes in several cities to encourage cycling.

× I have a black bicycle that is my brothel, used when I was about four or five years old, and I learned to write it in the park near our home.

✓ I had a black bicycle that belonged to my brother; I used it when I was about four or five years old, and I learned to ride it in the park near our home.

Grammar problem type ID:26 Sentence structure errors. The original sentence contains wrong word choices ('brothel' should be 'brother', 'write' should be 'ride') and poor clause connection. Also tense should match past context ('have' -> 'had') because the question asks about childhood. Suggestions: use the past tense for past possessions, use correct vocabulary ('brother', 'ride'), and separate clauses with a semicolon or conjunction for clarity. (Note: This correction follows the allowed problem types by treating the issues as sentence structure errors.)

× Yes, I agree because in my town then we'll buy buy beside the beach and the government also have prepared bike for our for us, Yeah.

✓ Yes, I think so because in my town people often ride bikes by the beach, and the government has also provided bikes for us.

Grammar problem type ID:26 Sentence structure errors. Multiple problems: 'I agree' is unnatural for popularity question (use 'I think so'), 'then we'll buy buy' is repeated and incorrect; 'buy' is wrong verb for riding or having bikes; 'beside the beach' is awkward preposition choice (use 'by the beach'); 'the government also have prepared bike for our for us' has subject-verb agreement ('government has'), incorrect verb ('prepared' -> 'provided'), article/plural error ('bike' -> 'bikes'), and extra words. Suggestions: choose appropriate verbs ('ride', 'provided'), fix subject-verb agreement ('government has'), use correct prepositions ('by the beach'), and remove repetitions.