Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., “used to” twice) and correct small grammar issues (e.g., “tutor tuition classes” → “tutoring classes” or just “tutoring”). Also use more varied vocabulary to describe the bike and your feelings.

예시: Yes — I had a bike as a child. I rode it to my tutoring classes and to visit friends, so it was my main way of getting around. It was a black sports bike, which I loved because it was fast and comfortable.

제안: Give a direct opinion first, then one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (singular/plural agreement, articles) and simplify phrasing. Use clearer vocabulary for routines and purposes (e.g., “commute,” “tuition,” “playground”).

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially among schoolchildren. For example, many students use bikes to commute to school or tutoring classes, and others cycle to meet friends or go to the playground because it is cheap and convenient.

× I used to ride it when I used to go to my tutor tuition classes and to visit my friends sometime.

✓ I used to ride it when I went to my tuition classes and to visit my friends sometimes.

The phrase 'used to' indicates a past habitual action and should not be repeated before 'go'; use simple past 'went' or keep a single 'used to'. Also 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to mean on occasion. Suggestion: use 'I used to ride it when I went to my tuition classes and to visit my friends sometimes.'

× And I really love riding my bike as it was black in color and it was a sports bike.

✓ And I really loved riding my bike because it was black and it was a sports bike.

The sentence mixes present 'I really love' with past context 'it was'; maintain past tense 'loved'. 'Black in color' is wordy; use 'black'. Use 'because' for reason. Suggestion: 'And I really loved riding my bike because it was black and it was a sports bike.'

× The bike or you can say bicycle are mainly popular in my country among the young or children's who are basically in school or high school.

✓ Bikes, or you can say bicycles, are mainly popular in my country among young people who are basically in primary or high school.

Subject 'bikes' is plural so use 'are' is correct but original mixes singular/plural and has incorrect apostrophe in 'children's'. 'Young' should modify 'people' and 'children's' is wrong; use 'children' or 'young people'. Also 'primary' clearer than 'school'. Suggestion: 'Bikes, or you can say bicycles, are mainly popular in my country among young people who are basically in primary or high school.'

× They mainly uses to go for to their tuition or the transportation to the school and to their friends places or to the playground.

✓ They mainly use them to go to tuition, to school, to their friends' houses, or to the playground.

Subject 'They' requires verb 'use' (not 'uses'). The structure 'use to go for to' is incorrect; say 'use them to go to'. 'Tuition' can be used without article; 'friends places' needs possessive 'friends' houses'. Suggestion: 'They mainly use them to go to tuition, to school, to their friends' houses, or to the playground.'