Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ปรับประโยคให้ถูกต้องตามหลักไวยากรณ์ ใช้ tense ให้สอดคล้องกัน และลดความซ้ำซ้อน ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรงคำถามแล้วขยายรายละเอียดสั้น ๆ โดยไม่เกิน 4 ประโยค เช่น ใช้ past simple/used to ให้สอดคล้อง และอธิบายเหตุผลของการเลิกขี่อย่างชัดเจน

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it every evening after school until I had an accident. After the crash I injured my leg, so I stopped riding for a long time. I still remember how much I enjoyed cycling back then.

제안: ปรับโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจน ใช้ linking words และคำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม อธิบายเหตุผลอย่างเป็นระบบ ไม่ขัดแย้งในความเห็น ตัวอย่างเช่น เริ่มด้วยคำตอบตรง ๆ แล้วให้เหตุผลสองข้อสั้น ๆ ใช้คำเชื่อม เช่น because, however, therefore และหลีกเลี่ยงข้อผิดพลาดไวยากรณ์เรื่อง subject-verb agreement

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. First, many roads and pavements are rough and uneven, which makes cycling uncomfortable and unsafe. Second, people prefer motorcycles and buses because they are faster and more convenient for daily travel. Therefore, most people choose motorbikes over bicycles.

× When I was a child I used to have a bike and I ride it every day, every evening after school.

✓ When I was a child, I used to have a bike and I rode it every day, every evening after school.

The sentence mixes past habitual 'used to' with present tense 'ride'. The main verb describing repeated past action should be in past tense 'rode'. Add a comma after the introductory clause for clarity. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past events; use 'rode' or restructure as 'I used to ride it every day.'

× But then when I got injured because of the crash, I stopped riding a bike.

✓ But then, when I got injured in the crash, I stopped riding my bike.

Use past tense 'got injured' is correct, but 'because of the crash' is wordy; 'in the crash' is more natural. Also use possessive 'my bike' to specify ownership. Add comma after 'But then' for clarity.

× I don't think but it's a popular in my country because of the pavement that is rough and uneven.

✓ I don't think so, and it's not very popular in my country because the pavements are rough and uneven.

Original has pronoun/connector issues and article/adjective problems. 'I don't think' needs 'so' to complete the phrase. 'It's a popular' is incorrect; should be 'it's not very popular' to match intended meaning. 'Pavement' should be plural 'pavements' or 'the pavement is' with matching verb. Use 'because' followed by clause without 'that'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'pavements are'.

× Also that make who want to ride a bike.

✓ Also, that discourages people who want to ride a bike.

The clause 'that make who want to ride a bike' is ungrammatical. 'That' (referring to rough pavements) requires a singular verb 'discourages'. Add a clear subject 'people' after the verb to indicate who is affected. Use a relative clause 'who want to ride a bike' to modify 'people'.

× It's difficult and also the transportation that people use is my country is not a bike but it's a motorcycle.

✓ It's difficult, and the main transportation people use in my country is motorcycles, not bicycles.

Original repeats 'is' and misorders phrases. Use 'the main transportation people use in my country' then state 'is motorcycles' (plural) or 'is the motorcycle' depending on context; plural is more natural. Contrast with 'not bicycles'. Keep word order clear and avoid unnecessary 'it's' repetitions.