Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy (use correct verb tenses and articles), simplify and organize the answer into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details, and avoid filler words. Use linking words (for example, “when” and “so”) correctly to make the sequence clear. Also be more specific about ages and actions to enrich content.

예시: Yes. I had a mountain bike when I was in grade seven. My father bought it for me as a reward after I passed my exams, so I spent a lot of time riding it around the neighborhood. I often shared it with my neighbor because she didn’t have a bike.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and add linking words (for example, “because”, “for example”, “so”) to make your explanation coherent. Mention where and why people use bikes (commuting, markets, short trips) to be more specific.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for daily commuting and short trips. For example, students and market vendors often ride bikes to save money and avoid traffic, so bicycles remain a common mode of transport in both cities and small towns.

× Yes, I do actually I have a mountain bicycle when I was young, actually that time I'm in grade 7, so my father buy, uh, buy that bicycle for me when I am past my exams. So I really love that one. I share with my friends because neighbor friend doesn't have then we.

✓ Yes, I did. Actually, I had a mountain bicycle when I was young. At that time I was in grade seven, so my father bought that bicycle for me after I passed my exams. I really loved it. I shared it with my friends because my neighbor did not have one.

Multiple tense and agreement errors: 'do' should be past 'did' to match 'when you were a child' (Grammar problem type ID 6: Present tense issue and 5: Past tense issue). 'I have' should be past 'I had' (5). 'I'm in grade 7' should be past 'I was in grade seven' (5). 'my father buy' should be past 'my father bought' (5). 'when I am past my exams' should be 'after I passed my exams' — incorrect tense and word choice (5 and 11 for preposition/word choice). 'I really love that one' should be past 'I really loved it' to keep past narration (5). 'I share with my friends' should be past 'I shared it with my friends' (5). 'neighbor friend doesn't have then we' is ungrammatical: corrected to 'my neighbor did not have one' (12: pronoun use and 5: tense). Suggestion: keep all verbs in past tense when describing past events, use correct past forms (bought, passed, shared), use articles and pronouns correctly ('my neighbor', 'one'), and use 'after' for sequence rather than 'when' + wrong tense.

× Yes, actually my country is very popular bicycle because people are using uh for day-to-day life.

✓ Yes, actually bicycles are very popular in my country because people use them for day-to-day life.

Errors: wrong subject structure and verb forms. 'my country is very popular bicycle' is ungrammatical — correct is 'bicycles are very popular in my country' (Grammar problem type ID 1: Singular and plural issue and 26: Sentence structure errors). 'people are using uh for day-to-day life' should be 'people use them for day-to-day life' to use the simple present for habitual actions and include the object 'them' (6: Present tense issue and 12: Incorrect use of pronouns). Suggestion: Use plural noun 'bicycles' as the subject, simple present 'use' for habits, and include the pronoun 'them' to refer back to bicycles.