Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevaplarınız açık ama bazı dilbilgisi ve akıcılık hataları var. Konu cümlesiyle doğrudan başladınız ki iyi; fakat gereksiz dolgu kelimeleri (“Uh”) kullanmaktan kaçının ve geçmiş zamanda doğru fiil yapılarını kullanın (ör. “bought me” değil “bought it for me” veya “bought me a bike”). Ayrıca fazla tekrar eden ifadeler yerine bir iki ek ayrıntı verin (ör. hangi yaşta, nerede sürerdiniz). Bağlaçlarla cümleleri daha akıcı bağlayın (e.g. “because”, “so”, “when”).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink because I have always loved that color, and my father bought it for me so I could ride to school. I started using it at about eight years old and usually rode it with my friends in the neighborhood.

제안: Cevabınız fikir veriyor ama dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimi hataları var. İlk cümlede yanlış kelime (“bags”) kullanılmış; ayrıca “costs are cheap” yerine “are inexpensive/cheap” ve “derive a bike” yerine “ride a bike” demelisiniz. Cümle yapısını basit tutun ve bir veya iki destekleyici neden verin, bağlaçlarla bağlayın (e.g. “because”, “so”, “for example”). Daha spesifik örnekler eklemek faydalı olur (şehir/kırsal farkı, ulaşım veya spor amaçlı kullanım).

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and easy to learn to ride. For example, many students use bicycles to get to school, and people in smaller towns often prefer them for short trips since traffic can be heavy in cities.

× My bike's color is pink because I love pink so much.

✓ My bike's color was pink because I loved pink so much.

The examiner asked about a past situation ('when you were a child'), so verbs should be in the past tense. 'Is' and 'love' are present tense; they should be 'was' and 'loved' to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: keep all verbs referring to childhood in past tense (was, loved).

× Uh, also my father bought to me because of my school.

✓ Also, my father bought it for me because of school.

The verb 'buy' uses the preposition 'for' when indicating the recipient (bought it for me). 'Bought to me' is incorrect. 'Because of my school' is awkward; 'because of school' or 'for school' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'bought it for me' and prefer 'for school' or 'because I needed it for school.'

× Yes, bags are. Yes, bikes are popular in our country because bikes costs are cheap and all people may learn to derive a bike because it is easy.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country because they are inexpensive and everyone can learn to ride a bike easily.

This sentence has multiple structural and word choice problems. 'Yes, bags are' is irrelevant and likely a mistake; remove it. 'Bikes costs are cheap' mixes plural and singular and uses 'costs' incorrectly; use 'they are inexpensive' or 'bike costs are low.' 'All people may learn to derive a bike' contains wrong verb 'derive' and awkward modal 'may'; use 'everyone can learn to ride a bike' and place 'easily' after the verb. Suggestion: simplify to 'they are inexpensive' and 'everyone can learn to ride a bike easily.'