Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with verb tense and small grammar points: use past tense for past events (I had, not I do have). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences). For example, mention the age more clearly and one memory or feeling to enrich the answer.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was in the 11th year of elementary school, and I used to ride it to school every day. Because it was lightweight and bright red, I remember feeling very proud and free whenever I rode it.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect word choices (e.g., 'air' is incorrect — use 'motorbikes' or 'cars'). Use precise vocabulary: 'prefer' instead of 'would rather purchase in something.'

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in Vietnam today. Although some people use them, most prefer faster options such as motorbikes or cars because they are quicker for commuting and more convenient for carrying goods.

× Yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the response should use past tense. 'Do have' is present tense and mismatches the time reference. Use 'had' to match the past context and maintain subject-verb agreement.

× When I was small I remembered that my dad bought me one when I was in 11 elementary school and I love to bike at that time.

✓ When I was small I remember that my dad bought me one when I was in 11th grade at elementary school and I loved to ride my bike at that time.

Multiple issues: the context is past, so use present simple 'I remember' to state a lasting memory or past simple 'I remembered' with consistent past verbs; here 'bought' is correct past. 'I was in 11 elementary school' is incorrect word order and form: use 'in 11th grade' or 'in grade 11' and place 'elementary school' appropriately (note: if elementary school does not have grade 11, choose correct level). 'I love to bike at that time' mixes present 'love' with past timeframe; use past 'loved' and use 'ride my bike' rather than 'bike' as a verb form for clarity. Suggestion: 'When I was small I remember that my dad bought me one when I was in 11th grade and I loved to ride my bike at that time.'

× No, I don't think so because people in Vietnam prioritize their time to be fast and convenient, so they would rather they would rather purchase in something convenient more like car or air.

✓ No, I don't think so because people in Vietnam prioritize speed and convenience, so they prefer to buy more convenient transport such as cars or motorcycles.

Problems: 'prioritize their time to be fast and convenient' is awkward and ungrammatical; use 'prioritize speed and convenience.' The phrase 'they would rather they would rather purchase in something convenient' repeats 'they would rather' and uses incorrect preposition 'in.' Use 'prefer to buy' or 'prefer purchasing.' 'More like car or air' is unclear and ungrammatical; likely meant 'cars or motorcycles' or 'cars or public transport/air travel.' Ensure consistent verb forms and clearer nouns. Suggestion: '...so they prefer to buy more convenient transport such as cars or motorcycles.'