Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more precise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid vague age range and the odd phrase “rolled back to school”. Add one specific detail or memory and use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bright red bicycle when I was ten, and I used it to ride to school every day. Because the route was mostly flat, I could get there in about ten minutes, which made me feel independent.

제안: Correct vocabulary errors and make the opinion clearer: use a topic sentence then support it with a specific reason and a linking word. Avoid tense/number mistakes (e.g., 'bikes' not 'bags'; 'are' vs 'was'). Keep answers concise and include a concrete example or trend.

예시: I don't think bicycles are as popular in China as they used to be. For example, many people now choose electric scooters or cars for convenience, so fewer commuters ride bikes to work.

× My parents bought me a bicycle when I was 10 or 11 years old and I rolled back to school every day.

✓ My parents bought me a bicycle when I was 10 or 11 years old and I rode it back to school every day.

The verb 'roll' in past tense 'rolled' is not the correct collocation for riding a bicycle. Use 'ride' (past 'rode') to describe using a bicycle. Also include the object 'it' to clarify what was ridden. Suggestion: use 'rode it' for natural past-tense expression.

× I don't think bags are as popular as it was before in China because nowadays people prefer to drive electric cars around instead of bicycles.

✓ I don't think bikes are as popular as they were before in China because nowadays people prefer to drive electric cars instead of bicycles.

The original sentence has several pronoun and noun errors: 'bags' is likely a typo for 'bikes'; 'it was' is incorrect because the subject 'bikes' is plural, so use the plural pronoun 'they' and plural past tense 'were'. Also 'drive electric cars around instead of bicycles' is redundant; keeping 'drive electric cars instead of bicycles' is clearer. Suggestion: replace 'bags' with 'bikes', use 'they were', and simplify the contrasting phrase.