Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify the main idea with a single clear topic sentence and avoid unrelated phrases. Use one concise sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add one supporting detail (e.g., who gave it to you, how often you rode it, or a short memory). Keep total length under five sentences and use linking words if you add details.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a small red bike my parents bought for me when I was seven, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend.

제안: Give a clear, fluent opinion and avoid filler words and unclear phrases. State your overall view, then support it with specific reasons or an example. Use linking words (for example, however, because) to connect ideas. Avoid vague or incorrect words like “seamless” in this context—use precise vocabulary (e.g., uncommon, less common).

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country; however, they are more commonly used by boys. For example, many boys ride bicycles to school or around the neighborhood, while cultural norms mean fewer girls ride regularly.

× I had the right side.

✓ I had one.

The original sentence is unclear and does not fit context. It seems the speaker intended to say they had a bicycle as a child and maybe meant 'I had one.' This is a sentence structure and clarity issue; replace with 'I had one.' to clearly refer to the bicycle mentioned in the question. Use a simple subject and verb with the pronoun 'one' to refer back to 'a bike'.

× Yes, bikes are quite popular in our country, but uh, just the boys actually ride the bikes.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in our country, but usually only boys actually ride them.

The original sentence is awkward and contains redundancy ('ride the bikes') and informal fillers ('uh'). This is a sentence structure problem. Replace 'just the boys' with 'usually only boys' and use the pronoun 'them' to avoid repeating 'bikes'. Remove fillers for clearer spoken or written English.

× Umm, girls are seamless when they do that.

✓ Umm, girls rarely do that.

'Seamless' is incorrect here; it is an adjective meaning without seams and does not convey the intended meaning. The speaker likely meant 'do not ride bikes' or 'rarely do that.' This is an incorrect word choice (adjective misuse). Use 'rarely' (an adverb) to modify the verb phrase 'do that.'