Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Старайтесь говорить более связно и избегать заполнителей («uh»). Начните с чётного тематического предложения, затем приведите 1–2 конкретных подробности (например, сколько вам было лет, кто вам её подарил, какое у неё было особенное качество) и завершите коротким заключением. Следите за грамматикой: предложение «Which I used to drive when I was a child» неудачно оформлено — лучше использовать придаточное предложение или простое продолжение.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small pink bike that my parents gave me when I was seven. I rode it every day around our neighborhood and loved how light and easy it was to handle. It was one of my favorite childhood possessions.

제안: Говорите более точно и логично: используйте связки (for example, because, therefore) и корректную грамматику. Избегайте неправильных местоимений («your» вместо «their») и разделяйте идеи в 1–2 поддерживающих предложениях с конкретными причинами и примером. Также используйте фразы типа «save money» и «protect the environment» вместо разрозненных словосочетаний.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular. For many families it is a cheap and convenient way to get children to school, and cycling also helps people save money on transport. For example, in cities with good bike lanes more commuters choose bikes to protect the environment.

× I uh, had a little pink, uh, bike. Which I used to drive when I was a child and to be honest, I really like it.

✓ I had a little pink bike, which I used to ride when I was a child, and to be honest, I really liked it.

The sentence contains a fragment ('Which I used to drive...') and incorrect verb choice. 'Drive' is not correct for bicycles in this context; the correct verb is 'ride'. Also, 'to be honest, I really like it' mixes past and present; since the speaker refers to a childhood bike, past tense 'liked' is appropriate. Combine the fragment with the previous clause to form a single sentence. Suggestions: use 'ride' for bikes, keep tense consistent (past), and avoid sentence fragments by attaching clauses with commas or conjunctions. Grammar problem type ID: 9 Grammar problem type: Verb in the past participle form

× I enjoyed every day.

✓ I enjoyed it every day.

The original lacks an object; 'enjoyed every day' is awkward because 'every day' modifies the frequency but needs an object or pronoun. Add 'it' to indicate what was enjoyed. Also, past tense 'enjoyed' is correct for talking about childhood. Suggestion: include the object ('it') and place 'every day' after the verb phrase. Grammar problem type ID: 6 Grammar problem type: Present tense issue

× I think yes, because not all of people can drive your or their kids to school and you can save.

✓ I think so, because not all people can drive their kids to school, and you can save a lot of money.

Problems: 'I think yes' is unnatural; use 'I think so'. 'Not all of people' should be 'not all people'. 'Your or their kids' mixes second and third person; use 'their' for general statements. The fragment 'and you can save.' is incomplete; specify what is saved ('a lot of money'). Suggestions: use consistent pronouns ('their') for generalizations, use 'so' after 'I think', and complete the clause by stating what is saved. Grammar problem type ID: 12 Grammar problem type: Incorrect use of pronouns

× A lot of money and uh, you can keep environment.

✓ You can save a lot of money and help protect the environment.

'Keep environment' is incorrect collocation; use 'protect the environment' or 'help protect the environment'. Also, sentence fragments should be combined into a full sentence. Move 'a lot of money' into the clause with 'save' for clarity. Suggestions: use appropriate verbs with 'environment' such as 'protect', include articles ('the environment'), and combine fragments into complete sentences. Grammar problem type ID: 13 Grammar problem type: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs