Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap doğal ancak daha net ve düzenli olabilir. Başlangıçta doğrudan bir konu cümlesiyle cevap verin, sonra 1–2 destekleyici cümle ekleyin. Detay verirken belirsiz ifadelerden (ör. “smiggles”, “freckles” bağlamı) kaçının ve bağlaçlar kullanarak akışı iyileştirin. Ayrıca cümleleri 3–4 cümleyle sınırlayarak gereksiz tekrarları engelleyin.

예시: I did have a bike when I was a child. It was pink and had small decorative stickers that made it stand out. Because of its bright colour and decorations, many of my friends noticed it and wanted to ride it when we played in my neighbourhood.

제안: Cevap mantıklı fakat ifade tekrarı ve eksik biten cümleler var. İlk cümlede net bir görüş belirtin, ardından nedenleri açık ve kısa cümlelerle sıralayın. Bağlaçlar (for example, therefore, because) kullanarak mantıksal akışı güçlendirin ve cümleleri tamamlayın.

예시: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. One reason is that there are few dedicated bike lanes, especially in smaller towns. As a result, people feel unsafe cycling because the roads are designed mainly for cars.

× I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink and even had some freckles with smiggles on it which showed it attracted attention of my friends while I was riding in my hometown.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink and even had some little smudges on it, which showed it attracted the attention of my friends while I was riding it in my hometown.

The original sentence mixes awkward noun choice and omission of articles and object pronoun. 'Freckles with smiggles' is unclear; 'little smudges' or 'scratches' is more natural. 'Which showed it attracted attention of my friends' needs the definite article 'the' and the object pronoun 'it' after 'riding'. Also add a comma before 'which'. Keep past tense throughout since describing a past situation. Suggestions: replace unclear nouns with natural ones, include articles ('the attention'), and include the pronoun object ('riding it').

× I actually do not think that bikes are popular in my country.

✓ I actually don't think bikes are popular in my country.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable but wordy. Contraction 'don't' is natural in spoken English. No tense change needed; present simple correctly expresses a general opinion. Suggestion: use contractions for natural spoken style.

× This is because we do not have, especially in my hometown, special roads to be able to safely ride bikes.

✓ This is because we do not have, especially in my hometown, special roads for safely riding bikes.

The original uses an awkward infinitive phrase 'to be able to safely ride bikes'. Better is 'roads for safely riding bikes' or 'roads where we can safely ride bikes'. Also move 'especially in my hometown' to avoid interrupting the clause. Suggestion: use 'for + -ing' or 'where + clause' to express purpose/ability and place adverbial phrases where they do not break the clause.

× We usually have roads which are suitable only for cars, but there are no.

✓ We usually have roads that are suitable only for cars, but there are none for bicycles.

The clause 'but there are no' is incomplete; 'no' requires a noun following it ('none' is acceptable but needs context). Replacing with 'none for bicycles' completes the comparison. Also 'which' should be 'that' in restrictive clauses in spoken/written English. Suggestion: complete elliptical statements and specify the noun after 'none', e.g., 'none for bicycles'.