Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve verb tense and grammar, make the answer more concise, use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details with linking words. Avoid filler sounds (umm) and redundancy. Specifically: change present tense to past (‘I had a bike’), correct verb forms (‘taught me’), reduce repetition, and use linking words like ‘but’ or ‘however’ to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad taught me how to ride it, but at first it was difficult to balance without training wheels. As a result, I fell a few times before I became confident.

제안: Clarify the main point and use accurate vocabulary and structures. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No or I think...), then give specific reasons and examples using linking words such as ‘because’, ‘however’ or ‘for example’. Avoid confusing phrases like ‘lose their injuries’. Use precise terms: ‘less popular’, ‘electric scooters’, ‘roller skates’. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I think bicycles are less popular now than they used to be. This is because many children prefer electric scooters and roller skates, which are seen as more convenient and modern. For example, electric scooters are widely available for short trips in cities.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about possession during childhood (past). The student used present tense 'have' instead of past tense 'had'. Use past tense to match the time frame. Suggestion: use 'had' when referring to something you owned in the past.

× My dad teach me how to use it when I was a kid

✓ My dad taught me how to ride it when I was a kid.

Two issues: verb tense and verb choice. The main grammatical error is past tense: 'teach' should be past 'taught' to match 'when I was a kid'. Also 'use it' is awkward for a bike; 'ride it' is idiomatic. Suggestion: use past tense verbs for past events and choose verbs appropriate to the activity.

× and I remember that was a little bit hard to learn to use the bike without the support umm

✓ and I remember that it was a little hard to learn to ride the bike without the support.

Missing subject 'it' after 'remember' and slight tense/wording issues. Use 'it was' to form a correct clause and 'ride the bike' is more natural. Also 'a little bit hard' can be simplified to 'a little hard'. Suggestion: include the subject for clauses and use natural collocations like 'learn to ride'.

× and I have of course a little bit like fell from there.

✓ and I also, of course, fell off it a little bit.

The original mixes present 'have' with past 'fell' and uses 'from there' incorrectly. Use past tense 'fell' and the phrasal verb 'fell off it' to indicate falling from the bike. Also reorder words for clarity: 'I also, of course, fell off it a little.' Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and use correct prepositional phrase 'fell off'.

× I think the bike used to be a more popular, uh, in the past,

✓ I think bikes used to be more popular in the past,

Plural/singular and article use: 'the bike' is unnatural when speaking generally; use plural 'bikes'. Also 'a more popular' is incorrect; use 'more popular' without 'a'. 'Used to' correctly indicates past habit. Suggestion: use plural for general statements and omit 'a' before 'more popular'.

× but nowadays with the technology and new like transports, uh, kids just lose, uh, their injuries of them.

✓ but nowadays with technology and new kinds of transport, kids just avoid those kinds of injuries.

Multiple issues: unnecessary 'the' before 'technology'; 'new like transports' is ungrammatical—use 'new kinds of transport' or 'new transportation options'; 'kids just lose their injuries of them' is incorrect meaning and structure. Likely intended meaning is that kids avoid or no longer get those injuries. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles, use correct noun phrases and verbs that convey intended meaning (avoid/experience injuries).

× They use more like electric scooter or skates and rollers.

✓ They use more electric scooters, skates, and rollerblades.

Problems with countable nouns and parallel structure. 'Electric scooter' should be plural 'electric scooters' to match 'they use more'. 'Skates and rollers' is awkward; use 'skates and rollerblades' or 'roller skates'. Maintain parallel plural forms in a list. Suggestion: use plural nouns and consistent parallel lists.