Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it's slightly informal and could be expanded with one or two specific details to enrich it. Aim for a concise topic sentence followed by a supporting detail (e.g., who gave it to you, how you used it, or a memorable experience). Keep responses natural and avoid filler words like “actually.”

예시: Yes, I did. It was a yellow bike with rainbow-colored tires that my parents gave me for my seventh birthday, and I rode it every afternoon around the neighborhood until it got too small.

제안: Your main idea is relevant, but the answer is repetitive and wordy. Remove repeated words and organize supporting details with linking words (e.g., “for example,” “also,” “in addition”) to make it coherent. Provide specific contexts (commuting, markets, leisure) and one brief reason or example to support your view. Keep to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular. For example, many people use them to commute to work or school, and others ride them for exercise and leisure on weekends. In cities with heavy traffic, bicycles are a practical and affordable option.

× It was a yellow coated bike with rainbow colored tires.

✓ It was a yellow-coated bike with rainbow-colored tires.

Hyphenate compound adjectives before a noun: 'yellow-coated' and 'rainbow-colored' are compounds modifying 'bike' and 'tires'. Also use hyphens to improve clarity. Additionally, 'yellow coated' without hyphen could be misread as 'yellow' coating 'coated bike'; hyphens connect words functioning together as one adjective. Suggestion: Use hyphens for compound adjectives before nouns: 'yellow-coated', 'rainbow-colored'.

× Yes, I do believe that they are popular often.

✓ Yes, I do believe that they are often popular.

The adverb 'often' is misplaced at the end, causing awkward word order. Adverbs of frequency (often) normally appear before the main verb or after auxiliary verbs: 'are often popular' or 'do often believe' depending on meaning. Here 'are often popular' correctly modifies 'popular'. Suggestion: Place adverbs of frequency before the main adjective or verb: 'they are often popular'.

× Even when I was young, people would often use bikes as transport, transportation, transportation and even for entertainment, often for physical activity and improvement as well.

✓ Even when I was young, people often used bikes for transportation, entertainment, and physical exercise or self-improvement.

This sentence has repetition ('transport, transportation, transportation') and awkward parallel structure. 'Would often use' is acceptable for habitual past but mixing with 'was young' and repeated words creates redundancy. Also 'physical activity and improvement' is unclear; 'physical exercise' and 'self-improvement' are clearer. The corrected sentence uses parallel list items and consistent past habitual tense: 'often used'. Suggestion: Remove repeated words, use parallel structure in lists, and choose clearer nouns ('transportation', 'entertainment', 'physical exercise').