Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is very short and natural but too brief. Give a clear topic sentence then add one or two supporting details (e.g., when you had it, how you used it, who you rode with) using linking words. Keep it under five sentences and avoid fillers like “yeah” alone — use “Yes” or “Yes, I did.”

예시: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle when I was about eight, and I used it to ride to school and to visit my friends. In addition, I practiced riding in the park every weekend, which helped me become more confident on busy roads.

제안: The idea is clear but the answer is repetitive and informal. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific reasons or examples using linking words (for example, because / moreover). Avoid repetition and spoken fillers (“like”, repeated words). Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., cyclists, social media posts, commuting).

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for commuting, especially in cities. Moreover, social media shows this trend — several of my friends often post photos of their bicycles and cycling routes, which suggests a growing cycling culture.

× Well yes, because I've seen a lot of guys biking and like a lot of a lot of my friends post their bikes and with stories.

✓ Well, yes. I've seen a lot of guys biking, and many of my friends post pictures of their bikes with stories.

The original sentence has awkward and incorrect verb and noun forms. 'a lot of a lot of my friends' is redundant and ungrammatical; replace with 'many of my friends'. 'post their bikes and with stories' mixes verbs and prepositions incorrectly; use 'post pictures of their bikes with stories' to show what is posted. Use commas and a period to separate clauses for clarity. Also maintain present perfect 'I've seen' consistent with experience; 'biking' is fine as a gerund describing activity.