Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and fillers, correct tense and expressions, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. For example, say when you received it or a specific memory to make the answer vivid.

예시: Yes, I did — my father gave me a red bicycle when I was eight. I loved riding it around the park every afternoon, and because of that I have many happy memories of learning to ride and racing my friends.

제안: Provide a clearer, grammatically correct opinion sentence, use correct words and linking phrases, and give a specific reason or example. Replace unclear words ('summary') with the intended word ('very hot' or 'hot in summer'), and correct verb forms.

예시: Not really. In my country summers are extremely hot, so many parents prefer their children to stay indoors; for example, kids often avoid cycling between noon and late afternoon because of the heat.

× Yes, I had the bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Using 'the bike' implies a specific bike already known to listener; the original intended meaning is general possession in childhood, so 'a bike' is correct. Use indefinite article for non-specific singular nouns.

× I really enjoyed it this this time and uh, I can't forget the memories I had with this bike.

✓ I really enjoyed it at that time, and I can't forget the memories I had with that bike.

The phrase 'this this time' is incorrect and redundant; 'at that time' fits past context. Also tense consistency: 'really enjoyed' (past) pairs with 'can't forget' (present perfect/ present acceptable for lasting memory) but using 'had with that bike' is ok; 'that bike' matches earlier 'a bike'. Replace filler 'uh' and fix word order and demonstrative pronoun to match past reference.

× I don't think so because my country is a summary on the summer.

✓ I don't think so because my country is very hot in the summer.

The original 'is a summary on the summer' is ungrammatical and likely a wrong word choice. To describe climate use adjective phrases: 'is very hot in the summer' or 'has very hot summers.' This corrects verb 'is' with proper complement and idiomatic expression.

× The heat is unbelievable, so most of the families don't allow their children to go out and using their bikes.

✓ The heat is unbelievable, so most families don't allow their children to go out and use their bikes.

'Most of the families' is awkward; 'most families' is more natural. After 'don't allow someone to', the verb should be in base form 'use', not 'using'. Also remove unnecessary 'the' before 'families.' This fixes quantifier/article use and verb form after 'allow.'