Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and grammatically correct, keep answers concise (max 5 sentences), use a clear topic sentence and smooth linking words. Avoid hesitation sounds (“uh”, “umm”), correct verb tense and article usage, and eliminate redundancy (e.g., “I do have a bike” vs past context). Add one or two specific details to enrich the answer (where you rode, approximate age, or a short feeling).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My cousin taught me to ride when I was about seven, and at first I was nervous, but after a few afternoons of practice I could ride by myself. I especially enjoyed cycling around the neighborhood park with my friends on weekends.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and then give two specific supporting points using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and repetition, use correct articles and plural forms ("bikes"), and prefer precise vocabulary ("common", "useful"). Give a brief example or statistic if possible to support the claim.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, many people use bicycles for daily commutes because they are cheap and avoid traffic, and secondly, cycling is a common leisure activity in parks and along rivers. For example, I often see hundreds of cyclists on weekends near the city river path.

× Yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. Using present tense 'do have' conflicts with the time reference. Improve by matching verb tense to the time frame: use 'had' for past possessions.

× When I was a child, I remember that my cousin, uh, taught me how to ride the bike.

✓ When I was a child, I remember that my cousin taught me how to ride a bike.

The sentence is mostly correct but contains an unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'bike'. The referent is non-specific, so use the indefinite article 'a'. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Keep 'remember' in present to express a present recollection about a past event; this is acceptable.

× At first I was really nervous, but as we practiced along, I was able to do it on my own and I was able to enjoy to ride it a bike.

✓ At first I was really nervous, but as we practiced, I was able to do it on my own and I enjoyed riding the bike.

Multiple issues: unnecessary adverb 'along' after 'practiced' and incorrect verb pattern 'enjoy to ride' (enjoy should be followed by gerund). Also article order: use 'the bike' or 'a bike' consistently; here 'the bike' is natural after mentioning learning. Use past tense 'enjoyed' to match past narration. Improve by removing 'along', changing 'was able to enjoy to ride' to 'enjoyed riding', and fixing article.

× Yes, I think umm, bike is popular in our country because it's not only a leisure time, but it is very essential in a day-to-day life umm, as another means of transportation here in, in our country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because they are not only for leisure, but they are an essential means of day-to-day transportation here.

Several noun-number and article problems: 'bike is popular' should be plural 'bikes are popular' to refer generally. 'It's not only a leisure time' is ungrammatical; use 'not only for leisure'. 'A day-to-day life' is awkward; use 'day-to-day transportation' or 'everyday life'. Replace repetitive 'in our country' and repeated filler words. Ensure subject-verb agreement with plural 'bikes' and consistent plural pronoun 'they'.