Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid awkward phrases like “right board” (possibly “neighborhood” or “yard”) and long relative clauses—use linking words (e.g., “and”, “which”) sparingly to keep sentences natural. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., “training wheels”, “neighborhood”, “build confidence”).

예시: Yes, I did. It was a small red bike with training wheels. I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon with friends, and this helped me gain confidence and improve my balance.

제안: Improve grammar, coherence and use linking words correctly. Begin with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons with concise examples. Correct collocations: say “short journeys” rather than “short community,” and “cost-effective” or “economical.” End the sentence cleanly instead of trailing off. Use connectors like “because” and “for example” in the right places.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular. They are cost-effective and convenient for short journeys, and they also provide good exercise. For example, many students and office workers cycle to school or work to avoid traffic and save money.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence uses 'did have' which is grammatically correct for emphasis but unnecessary in a simple past statement. Use the simple past 'had' to match the typical answer form. Suggestion: use 'I had' for concise, natural past-tense responses.

× It was a small red bike with training wheels and I used to ride it around the right board every afternoon with my friends, which helped me build confidence and balance.

✓ It was a small red bike with training wheels, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon with my friends, which helped me build confidence and balance.

The phrase 'right board' is incorrect and breaks sentence clarity. Likely intended 'neighborhood' or 'playground'. This is a sentence choice/word error affecting sentence structure. Also add a comma before 'and' connecting two independent clauses. Suggestion: replace unclear phrase with an appropriate noun such as 'neighborhood' and punctuate with a comma before 'and'.

× Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country many people use them for a short community and exercise because they act economical and help avoid traffic congestion for example, students and office workers often cycle to school while.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use them for short commutes and for exercise because they are economical and help avoid traffic congestion; for example, students and office workers often cycle to school or work.

This sentence has multiple structure and word choice problems: it is a run-on sentence missing proper punctuation, 'short community' is incorrect and should be 'short commutes', 'act economical' is wrong — use 'are economical', and the sentence ends with an unfinished clause 'while'. Corrections: split into two sentences or use proper connectors, replace wrong nouns/phrases, and complete the final clause. Suggestion: use 'short commutes', 'are economical', and finish the example clause with 'or work'.