Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar (tense and articles), reduce hesitation fillers, and organise into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Use a past-tense sentence to answer directly, then add specific examples and linking words. Keep it to no more than 4–5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was an old, bright-blue bicycle that I rode everywhere. For example, I often cycled through small forests near my home and along country roads. It was my main way to explore the neighbourhood and visit friends.

제안: Fix sentence structure and repetition, use linking words, provide specific reasons and an example. Start with a clear opinion, then add 2 supporting points (infrastructure and daily use) and a brief example or consequence. Avoid repeating phrases.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. There are many dedicated bicycle paths, so people feel safer cycling, and heavy traffic makes bikes a faster option during rush hour. For instance, my neighbour commutes to work by bike every day to avoid long car delays.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was child, uh, it was an uh, old bike and uh, it's bright blue bicycle that I rode everywhere, uh, for example, forests or Rd.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was an old, bright-blue bicycle that I rode everywhere, for example to the forests or down the road.

Mixed tenses and article errors: 'have' should be past tense 'had' because the time reference is 'when I was a child' (past). Missing article before 'child' and 'bicycle' and awkward word order. Use past simple consistently ('had', 'was', 'rode'). Add hyphen for compound adjective 'bright-blue' (optional) and use preposition 'to' before destinations and 'down the road' for 'Rd.' Replace filler 'uh' with pauses in speech. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with the time phrase and include necessary articles (a/the) and prepositions.

× In my country bikes are is bikes are popular because we have bicycle paths in my country and we have traffic jam and also people use bicycle every day.

✓ In my country, bikes are popular because we have bicycle paths, we often have traffic jams, and people also use bicycles every day.

Redundancy and subject-verb agreement: 'bikes are is bikes are' contains duplication and 'traffic jam' needs plural 'traffic jams' to match 'we often have'. 'Bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles' after 'use'. Also add commas for clarity and remove repeated phrase 'in my country'. Suggestion: remove duplicated words, ensure nouns agree in number with verbs and parallel list items ('we have..., we have..., and people use...'). Use plural forms when referring to habitual or countable items.