Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., “birthday gift” and “birthday present” are the same) and fix tense and article errors (say “a bike,” “when I was a child,” “it was pink”).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I received it as a birthday present from my parents, and it was bright pink. I loved riding it around the neighborhood, especially on weekends when my friends and I raced each other.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons with linking words. Avoid vague endings and incomplete sentences. Use plural/singular correctly and more precise vocabulary (e.g., “commuting to school or tuition classes,” “affordable and convenient”).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among schoolchildren. This is because they are an affordable and convenient way to commute to school and tuition classes, and they also help children gain independence and exercise.

× Yes, of course I had bike when in my childhood.

✓ Yes, of course I had a bike when I was a child.

The noun 'bike' is singular and requires an article 'a' before it; also 'in my childhood' is unnatural here — use 'when I was a child' for a clear time reference. Suggestion: include the indefinite article before singular countable nouns and use natural time expressions. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Actually I got it for a birthday gift like birthday present from my parents when I was a kid and it is it was in pink color.

✓ Actually I got it as a birthday present from my parents when I was a kid, and it was pink.

Use 'as a birthday present' rather than 'for a birthday gift like birthday present' (redundant and unidiomatic). 'Got' is correct past tense; 'it is it was' is mixed tense and redundant — keep past tense 'it was pink'. Also 'in pink color' is unnatural in English; use 'it was pink' or 'it was pink in color' (the shorter form is preferred). Suggestion: avoid redundant phrases and keep consistent past tense. Grammar problem type ID:9

× I loved it so much.

✓ I loved it so much.

This sentence is correct in past tense and matches the narrative; no change needed. It is included to indicate no grammatical error of tense. However, if emphasizing present feeling about past object, you could say 'I loved it' or 'I loved it so much.' Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, of course. Actually I think bikes are more popular in our country among kids, like among the school children because they can use it to do their everyday works like going to tuition classes to schools and also they can use it as the.

✓ Yes, of course. Actually, I think bikes are more popular in our country among kids, like schoolchildren, because they can use them to do their everyday tasks, like going to tuition classes and school.

Multiple issues: pronoun agreement and number — 'bikes' (plural) requires plural pronoun 'them' not 'it' (pronoun error and subject-verb agreement concern). 'School children' should be 'schoolchildren' or 'school children' without 'the'. 'Everyday works' is unidiomatic; use 'everyday tasks' or 'daily activities'. 'Going to tuition classes to schools' is redundant; use 'going to tuition classes and school.' The sentence ends incomplete 'as the.' Remove incomplete fragment. Keep present tense 'think' appropriate. Suggestion: use plural pronouns for plural nouns, common collocations (schoolchildren, everyday tasks), and avoid redundant prepositions. Grammar problem type ID:6