Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler phrases (e.g., "you know"), and provide one or two specific supporting details (e.g., when you got it, who gave it to you, or a memorable experience). Use linking words for coherence. Keep answers within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a small bicycle when I was about seven. My parents bought it for me as a birthday present, and I remember learning to ride it in the park with my father holding the seat until I could balance on my own.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence then add specific reasons with linking words and varied vocabulary. Avoid repetition and unnatural phrases (e.g., "to have a health to make a healthy body"). Mention concrete examples or statistics if possible. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes to school or work. In addition, cycling is a common form of exercise and many cities have bike lanes, which makes it a convenient and healthy option for daily travel.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It wasn't that big. It was just a small one because you know, I'm just a kid and I was small at that time.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It wasn't very big. It was just a small one because, you know, I was a kid and I was small at that time.

The original mixes present tense 'I'm just a kid' with past-tense context. Use past tense 'I was' to match the time frame. Also 'that big' is informal but acceptable; 'very big' is clearer. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent for events in the past. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Yes, bikes are very popular in our country because it can be used in transportation just like when going to school, work and even in your community.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country because they can be used for transportation, for example when going to school, to work, and even around your community.

The subject 'bikes' is plural, so the pronoun must be plural 'they' rather than singular 'it'. Also 'used in transportation' is better as 'used for transportation' and parallel list items should include prepositions for clarity. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches the noun and use consistent prepositions in lists. Grammar problem type ID:12

× It is also used for exercise, to burn more calories and to have a health to make a healthy body.

✓ They are also used for exercise, to burn calories, and to improve health and fitness.

The sentence has several problems: pronoun number (bikes -> they) and awkward adjective/noun use ('a health' is incorrect). 'To burn more calories' is acceptable but 'burn calories' is clearer. 'To improve health and fitness' provides natural collocations. Suggestion: use correct noun phrases ('health' not 'a health') and choose common collocations like 'improve health' or 'stay healthy'. Grammar problem type ID:13