Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use correct past tense and sentence structure. Begin with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I did or No, I didn’t). Then give one or two concise supporting details using correct grammar and linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid redundancy and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Also correct pronouns and articles (a bike, my junior high school years) and replace unclear phrases ("eye training to ride light it") with a clear description ("practice riding without training wheels").

예시: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bike when I was in junior high school, and I spent a lot of time practising to ride without training wheels. It was difficult at first because I felt unsteady, but after a few weeks I became more confident.

제안: Start with a clear opinion sentence and then add specific examples and linking words. Use correct plural forms and articles (high school students, bicycles). Make the supporting details more specific (why students and older people use bikes — convenience, low cost, short distances). Keep it concise (2–3 sentences) and use linking words like "for example" or "because" for coherence.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many high school and junior high students cycle to school because it's cheap and convenient, and older people often use bicycles for short trips around their neighborhood.

× Yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question asks about the past (Did you have...), so the student should use past tense. 'Have' in this context is present; 'did' matches the past-tense question. Use past simple to answer: 'Yes, I did.' Suggestion: Respond with past simple for past possessions (e.g., 'Yes, I did' or 'Yes, I had a bike').

× When I was junior high school student my parents bought me bike for me and the eye training to ride light it, but it's really difficult for me because I not so good at.

✓ When I was a junior high school student, my parents bought a bike for me and gave me some training to ride it, but it was really difficult for me because I was not very good at it.

This sentence has multiple structure and grammar issues: missing articles ('a junior high school student', 'a bike'), incorrect phrasing ('bought me bike for me' is redundant), wrong expression 'the eye training to ride light it' is unclear and should be 'gave me some training to ride it', tense mismatch (refers to past so use past 'was not'), and missing object 'at it.' Suggestions: Break into clear parts, use articles before singular nouns, avoid redundancy, use appropriate verbs ('gave training'), keep past tense consistent, and include object pronouns where needed.

× For example high school student or junior high school student tend to use bicycle to go to their schools and then also old people usually use.

✓ For example, high school students or junior high school students tend to use bicycles to go to their schools, and older people usually use them too.

The original sentence incorrectly uses singular nouns where plurals are required when speaking generally ('high school student' -> 'high school students') and mixes singular 'bicycle' with plural context. Also 'old people usually use' lacks an object; use 'use them' referring to bicycles. 'Older' is the correct comparative adjective for age. Suggestions: Use plural nouns to describe groups, match noun number with verbs and pronouns, and include clear pronouns for previously mentioned items.