Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, use past tense consistently, organize into a direct topic sentence followed by 1–2 supporting details, and correct grammar and word choice. Mention specific features (colour, type) briefly and one clear result (e.g. confidence, balance). Use linking words like “and” or “which” correctly.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small, bright red bicycle with training wheels, and I rode it every weekend around my neighborhood with friends. Riding often helped me build confidence and improved my balance.

제안: Answer directly then give 1–2 clear reasons with correct vocabulary and fewer hesitations. Avoid fillers like “umm” and “uh.” Use linking words such as “because” and “so” properly and be specific about who uses bikes and where.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in Hong Kong. Because the city is very busy, many people use bikes or e-bikes for short trips and commuting, especially in residential areas and parks, since they are faster and cheaper than walking.

× Yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. Using 'do have' is present tense and mismatches the timeframe. Use 'had' to match the past context.

× When I was child it was more and bright ride bicycle with training rides and I rode it every weekend around my neighborhood with my friends which helped me build a confident and balance.

✓ When I was a child it was a small, bright bicycle with training wheels, and I rode it every weekend around my neighborhood with my friends, which helped me build confidence and balance.

Multiple issues: missing article before 'child' (should be 'a child'), awkward adjective order and word choice ('more and bright ride bicycle' is ungrammatical), incorrect noun 'training rides' should be 'training wheels', run-on sentence needs commas and a conjunction, and 'a confident and balance' uses incorrect form and articles. Corrections: add 'a' before 'child'; use 'small, bright bicycle' with proper adjective order; replace 'training rides' with 'training wheels'; join clauses with 'and'; use 'confidence and balance' (nouns) rather than 'a confident and balance'. This matches past tense and clarifies meaning.

× I think definitely, umm, because Hong Kong is safe, uh, very busy, uh, city, uh, many people need to get faster so that I think bicycle is a good transportation of, uh, for people, uh.

✓ I definitely think so, because Hong Kong is a safe but very busy city, and many people need to travel quickly, so I think the bicycle is a good means of transportation for people.

Problems include word order ('I think definitely' is awkward), missing conjunctions and articles ('very busy, uh, city' needs 'a'), incorrect verb phrase 'need to get faster' (use 'need to travel quickly'), awkward noun phrase 'good transportation of' (use 'a good means of transportation' or 'good transport'), and extraneous fillers. Corrections: move 'definitely' after 'I' for natural order, add article 'a' before 'safe', add 'but' to contrast, use 'travel quickly' for intention, add 'the' before 'bicycle' or use plural 'bicycles' depending on meaning; here 'the bicycle' or 'bicycles' both acceptable—use 'the bicycle' to refer to the mode. These changes fix tense, article, preposition, and word choice issues.