Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cấu trúc trả lời lộn xộn, nhiều tiếng “uh/like” và thông tin không liên quan (nói về "bags" thay vì "bike"). Hãy trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó bổ sung 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: loại xe, ai tặng, cảm giác khi có). Giảm sử dụng tiếng lắp để mạch câu tự nhiên hơn và giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that my parents bought me for my seventh birthday. I used to ride it to my friend’s house and around the neighborhood every weekend, which made me feel independent and happy.

제안: Câu trả lời chung chung, lẫn lộn giữa "bikes" và "bags", nhiều tiếng ngập ngừng, và thiếu dẫn chứng cụ thể. Cần nêu quan điểm rõ ràng, dùng từ vựng liên quan (bicycle, commute, traffic, environment) và thêm ví dụ hoặc số liệu ngắn để thuyết phục. Hạn chế dài dòng, dùng 2–3 câu hỗ trợ với liên từ hợp lý (for example, because, so).

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular, especially in cities. Many people use them for short commutes because they are cheaper and help avoid traffic, and they are also environmentally friendly, for example students and office workers often cycle to work or school.

× Well, yes, uh, when I was a kid, uh, I've got like 4 bags.

✓ Well, yes, when I was a kid, I had about four bikes.

'Bags' is likely a wrong noun here; context asks about a bike. Also 'I've got' (present perfect) is incorrect for a past state. Use plural consistency and correct noun: 'four bikes'. Use simple past 'had' for a past possession. Suggestions: use the noun that matches the question (bike), use simple past for past situations, and write numbers in words for formality.

× Uh, it, it was because uh, I've lost them when I uh, like put them out of my house and someone took it away.

✓ It was because I had lost them when I put them outside my house and someone took them.

Mixed tenses: 'It was because' (past) should be followed by past perfect 'I had lost' to show earlier action relative to another past action. 'I've lost' (present perfect) is inappropriate. Use 'put them outside' instead of 'put them out of my house', and 'someone took them' to match plural 'them'. Suggestions: use past perfect for an action that happened before another past action, ensure pronoun number agreement.

× Umm, yes, I reckon that uh, like every families have uh, their own bags, uh, so that they can like go anywhere, uh, more convenient and it's also more eco friendly and it's easier to go anywhere.

✓ Yes, I reckon that every family has its own bike so they can get around more conveniently; it's also more eco-friendly and easier to travel.

'Every families' is incorrect: 'every' must be followed by a singular noun ('every family'). Agreement with verb: singular subject requires 'has' not 'have'. 'Their' can be used but 'its' is more grammatically consistent with singular 'family'; alternatively rephrase to use plural. 'Bags' is wrong noun; 'bike' fits context. Use adverb 'conveniently' not adjective 'convenient' after 'more'. Combine ideas and use hyphen in 'eco-friendly'. Suggestions: ensure 'every' pairs with singular noun, match verb number, choose correct noun, and use adverbs for manner.