Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence clarity, add a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and article use (e.g., "a teenager", "a second-hand bike"), and avoid small redundancies. Keep the answer within 3–4 concise sentences.

예시: Yes — I had a bicycle when I was a child. I bought a second-hand bike when I was a teenager while working part-time, and it was very reliable. Because I rode it every day around my neighborhood, it became something special to me.

제안: Clarify confusing phrases and improve coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific, linked reasons using appropriate linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "also"). Replace unclear phrases (e.g., "severed from the end for short damage") with precise ideas like "convenient for short journeys" and give a realistic time reference if needed.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use them because they are convenient for short journeys and cheaper than cars. For example, several of my friends cycle to work to avoid traffic and to stay fit.

× 'I bought a second hand bike when I was teenager while I was working part time and I like it because it was very reliable.'

✓ 'I bought a second-hand bike when I was a teenager while I was working part-time, and I liked it because it was very reliable.'

'Problems: incorrect tense consistency and missing articles/hyphens. Explanation: The sentence mixes past and present (bought/was/like). When narrating past events, maintain past tense: like -> liked. Also use the article a teenager and hyphenate compound adjectives (second-hand, part-time). Suggestion: Keep past tense throughout and include 'a' before teenager.'

× 'I rode it every day in my neighborhood so it becomes very special to me.'

✓ 'I rode it every day in my neighborhood so it became very special to me.'

'Problem: tense disagreement between clauses. Explanation: The main clause is past (rode), so the result clause should also be past (became), not present (becomes). Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for connected actions and results in past narratives.'

× 'Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country.'

✓ 'Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country.'

'No grammatical correction needed for tense. Explanation: This present-tense opinion is appropriate and grammatically correct.'

× 'Most people ride them because they are severed from the end for short damage and many of my friends cycle to work to avoid traffic and save money and to make the body fit at 5:00.'

✓ 'Most people ride them because they are convenient for short distances, and many of my friends cycle to work to avoid traffic, save money, and keep fit.'

'Problems: word choice and pluralization issues. Explanation: "severed from the end for short damage" is incorrect and likely intended as "convenient for short distances." "Make the body fit" is awkward; use keep fit. Also improve listing with commas and parallel verbs (avoid, save, keep). Suggestion: Replace incorrect phrase with "convenient for short distances," use parallel infinitives, and tighten punctuation.'