Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and on-topic: the examiner asked about a bike but your answer talks about a bag, which loses coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give 1–2 brief supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Keep to no more than 4–5 short sentences. Use specific details (age when you got the bike, how you used it) and correct vocabulary ("bike" not "bag").

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was about eight and rode it to school and around the neighborhood. Because my parents wanted me to get more exercise, I used it most weekends. It was a small blue bicycle with a basket, which made short trips very convenient.

제안: Good relevant content and clear opinion, but improve grammar, reduce repetition, and add one specific example or statistic. Use correct subject-verb agreement and clearer linking words (e.g., "because", "therefore"). Replace vague phrases like "not directly" with precise language (e.g., "it produces no tailpipe emissions"). Limit to 3–4 sentences and include a concrete detail (e.g., bike lanes, bike-share schemes).

예시: Yes, bikes are becoming increasingly popular in France. In recent years more people have started cycling because it produces no tailpipe emissions and is often faster than driving in congested cities. For example, Paris has expanded its bike lanes and introduced a large bike-share scheme, which has encouraged many commuters to switch to cycling.

× When I was a child, I had a bag.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike.

The sentence is grammatically correct for past tense, but it contradicts the examiner's question about a bike. Replace 'bag' with 'bike' to answer the question appropriately. Use past simple 'had' for possession in the past.

× I did not use it often because I didn't have the time to use it, but I liked it because I think it's very efficient if you want to go to a place that isn't far away.

✓ I did not use it often because I did not have much time, but I liked it because I thought it was very efficient for going to places that were not far away.

Mixed tenses and awkward phrasing: the sentence switches between past and present ('did not use' then 'I think'). Maintain past tense throughout when talking about childhood. Use 'did not have much time' for natural phrasing. Use 'thought' and 'was' to match past timeframe. Use 'for going to places that were not far away' for clearer structure.

× I think bikes are very popular in my country, so I live in France and I feel like these days the use of the bike is growing and growing.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in my country. I live in France, and I feel that bike use is growing these days.

Run-on sentence and awkward phrasing: split into two sentences for clarity. Use 'I feel that' instead of 'I feel like' for formal speech. 'The use of the bike is growing and growing' is redundant; 'bike use is growing' is more concise and grammatically natural in present tense.

× People wants to use the bike more and more because it's not polluting the air, not directly.

✓ People want to use bikes more and more because they do not directly pollute the air.

Subject-verb agreement: 'People' is plural, so the verb should be 'want' not 'wants'. Also improve noun number: use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. "It's not polluting the air, not directly" is awkward; change to 'they do not directly pollute the air' to match plural subject and clearer meaning.

× And it's also very convenient if you live in a big city.

✓ It is also very convenient if you live in a big city.

Minor style: avoid starting with 'And' in formal answers; replace with 'It is' for a smoother sentence. The sentence is otherwise correct; use 'a big city' appropriately as an indefinite article for a general statement.