Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (tense and modal mistakes), and avoid redundancy. Use one or two linking words to add a specific supporting detail (e.g., who taught you, how often you rode, or a brief memory). Keep to no more than 4–5 sentences.

예시: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was about seven, and my father taught me to ride in our neighborhood park. I used it almost every day to go to school and visit friends, which made me feel independent and confident.

제안: Answer directly and stay on topic. Avoid unrelated words (e.g., 'mobiles'). Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'for example', 'because'). Use consistent vocabulary (bikes, electric bikes, motorbikes) and correct sentence structure.

예시: Yes, bicycles are fairly popular in some groups, but traditional bikes are less common than electric bikes. For example, many students prefer electric bikes because they are faster and easier on hilly roads. However, most adults still use motorbikes for longer commutes.

× When I was a student they taught me to ride a bike so that I can could go to school on.

✓ When I was a student they taught me to ride a bike so that I could go to school.

This sentence contains incorrect modal verb usage and redundant/modality conflict. 'Can could' is wrong; choose one modal. Because the time reference is past ('When I was a student'), use the past modal 'could'. Also 'go to school on' is awkward and unnecessary; 'go to school' is sufficient. Suggestion: match verb modality to the time frame and remove redundant preposition.'

× Nowadays. No, mobiles are not popular in my country, but electric bikes are commonly used by students.

✓ No, motorcycles are not very common in my country nowadays, but electric bikes are commonly used by students.

The original begins with a fragment 'Nowadays.' which is a sentence structure error. Also 'mobiles are not popular' likely intends 'motorbikes' or 'motorcycles'; 'mobiles' means phones and does not fit the contrast with electric bikes. I corrected to 'motorcycles' and moved 'nowadays' to the end of the clause to fit natural word order. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments by attaching adverbs to complete clauses and ensure the nouns used match intended meaning.'

× People in my country usually drive a motorbike.

✓ People in my country usually ride motorbikes.

'Drive a motorbike' is not the usual collocation in English; we 'ride' a motorbike. Also use plural 'motorbikes' to match 'people' (general statement) for natural agreement. Suggestion: use correct verb collocations ('ride' for bikes/motorbikes) and make noun number consistent with a general plural subject.'