Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details linked logically. Avoid repetition and fix tense and article errors. For example, say who gave it, why you liked it, and one short anecdote using linking words like 'however' or 'because'.

예시: Yes. I had a small pink bike when I was a child; my father bought it for my sixth birthday, and I loved its bright color and the little bell. However, I fell off it once while trying to ride fast, so I was a bit scared for a while.

제안: Answer directly, then expand with one or two specific reasons and a linking word. Use slightly more formal vocabulary (e.g., 'public transport' or 'efficient public transit') and avoid filler phrases like 'yeah, that's it.'

예시: Not really. In my country most people prefer efficient public transport such as buses and trains, because they are faster and more convenient for long distances. As a result, cycling is mainly popular among students and hobbyists rather than commuters.

× My father gave me a bike and I really like that bike and but I unfortunately I fell down riding bikes so.

✓ My father gave me a bike, and I really liked that bike, but unfortunately I fell off while riding it.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses and has awkward phrasing. The action of liking the bike refers to the past context (when you were younger), so use past tense 'liked' rather than 'like'. 'Fell down riding bikes' is unidiomatic; use 'fell off' and specify 'while riding it' (singular 'it' refers to the bike). Remove extra conjunctions ('and but') and unnecessary filler ('so'). Suggestions: keep consistent past tense for events in childhood, use 'fell off' for falling from a bike, and use a singular pronoun to refer back to 'a bike'.

× Not really, because we have effective transportation systems.

✓ Not really, because we have an effective transportation system.

The original uses the plural 'transportation systems' which is grammatical but less natural here; more common is the singular collective 'transportation system'. This is a preference rather than strict error, but to match 'we have' and the general idea of a national system, use singular. Alternatively, if you mean many different systems, keep plural. Suggestion: choose singular 'system' when speaking generally about transportation in a country.

× So many people use the transportation system rather than riding bike and yeah, that's it.

✓ So many people use the transportation system rather than riding bikes, and that's it.

'Riding bike' is missing an article or plural; use 'riding a bike' or 'riding bikes'. Here plural 'riding bikes' fits contrast with 'use the transportation system'. Also add a comma before the conjunction and remove filler 'yeah' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'riding bikes' when speaking generally or 'riding a bike' when referring to one instance.