Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변은 질문에 직접적으로 응답했고 이유와 결과(어른이 되어 자전거를 산 것)를 제공해 대화가 명확합니다. 다만 불필요한 반복(‘bike’, ‘bicycle’)과 망설임이 없었고 연결어 사용이 제한적입니다. 문장을 더 자연스럽고 간결하게 만들기 위해 연결어를 적절히 사용하고 동일 의미의 단어 반복을 피하세요. 또한 구체적인 상황(몇 살에 샀는지, 어떤 종류의 자전거인지 등)을 덧붙이면 점수가 더 올라갑니다.

예시: No, I didn't. My parents thought it was too risky for me to ride alone in the park, so I didn't have one as a child. However, when I turned 22 I bought a lightweight city bike for commuting, and it was the first bicycle that was truly mine.

제안: 좋은 시작입니다: 의견을 분명히 제시했고 이유와 예시(공원, 강변, 자전거 동호회)를 제시했습니다. 그러나 말중간의 망설임(umm)이 잦고 연결어가 약해 논리 흐름이 다소 단조롭게 느껴집니다. 더 구체적인 통계나 변화의 정도(예: 자전거 도로의 증가 시기, 특정 도시 예시)를 덧붙이고, 'because' 이외의 연결 표현을 사용해 문장을 다양화하세요.

예시: Yes, I believe they're becoming more popular. In recent years the government has built many dedicated cycle lanes, especially along riversides, so more people now ride for exercise or commuting. As a result, you can often see large groups of cyclists on weekends.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it would be dangerous to go out in the park by myself riding a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it would be dangerous for me to go out in the park and ride a bike by myself.

The pronoun 'myself' is used reflexively but the sentence needs a clear subject for the infinitive phrase. Use 'for me to' to introduce the clause and place 'by myself' after the verb phrase. Suggestion: rephrase to 'dangerous for me to go out in the park and ride a bike by myself.' (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× So when I became an adult, I bought a bike for myself.

✓ When I became an adult, I bought a bike for myself.

Beginning the sentence with 'So when' is redundant and can make the sentence informal. Removing 'So' improves sentence structure and clarity. Suggestion: start with 'When I became an adult, I bought a bike for myself.' (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× That's the first time when I got my own bicycle.

✓ That was the first time I got my own bicycle.

Use past tense 'was' to match 'got' and omit 'when' because 'the first time' already introduces the time clause. Suggestion: 'That was the first time I got my own bicycle.' (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× Yes, I think they are popular in my country because, umm, these days there are more umm, tracks to ride bicycles on compared to the past.

✓ Yes, I think they are popular in my country because these days there are more tracks to ride bicycles on than in the past.

Use 'than in the past' for comparison rather than 'compared to the past.' Also remove filler 'umm' and ensure smooth word order. 'To ride bicycles on' is acceptable, but cleaner phrasing is 'tracks for riding bicycles.' Suggestion: 'there are more tracks for riding bicycles than in the past.' (Grammar problem type ID: 10)

× So people go out in the park or to the Riverside to ride bicycles and there are more groups of bicyclists.

✓ So people go to the park or to the riverside to ride bicycles, and there are more groups of bicyclists.

Use 'go to the park' rather than 'go out in the park.' 'Riverside' should be lowercase unless it is a proper noun and usually without 'the' depending on context; 'the riverside' is natural here. Add a comma before 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: 'people go to the park or to the riverside to ride bicycles.' (Grammar problem type ID: 11)