Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, grammatically correct and more organized. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. yes/no), then add one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words. Pay attention to past vs present tense (e.g. “I didn’t have a bike when I was a child” vs “Now I have one”).

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Now I’m 22 and my father bought me a Royal Enfield, which is a black Super Classic. I find it very useful for commuting and I’m really grateful to my father for the gift.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with two specific reasons connected by linking words. Use clearer vocabulary and correct grammar (e.g. plural forms, articles). Remove hesitation fillers. Provide examples or effects to strengthen your answer.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for young people. Moreover, popular movies and celebrity riders have made motorcycles fashionable, so many teenagers buy bikes to imitate the stars.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was kid, but now my age is 22.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but now I am 22 years old.

The sentence mixes present simple 'don't have' with a past time reference 'when I was'. Use past simple 'didn't have' for past situations (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). Also 'when I was kid' lacks the article 'a' and 'now my age is 22' is unnatural; use 'now I am 22 years old.' Suggestions: use consistent past tense for past events and natural present construction for current age.

× My father has a buy a buy for me and the bike name is Royal Enfield is a super classic and uh.

✓ My father bought a bike for me. The bike is a Royal Enfield Super Classic.

The original uses 'has a buy a buy' which is incorrect verb and noun structure; the correct past action is 'bought' (past tense) (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). Also 'the bike name is' is awkward; use 'The bike is a...' and capitalize/model name properly. Use 'a' before 'bike' when introducing it. Suggestions: use correct past-tense verb 'bought' and clear noun phrases for naming a model.

× It is a black color and now it is very helpful for me uh to having a bike and it is.

✓ It is black, and now having a bike is very helpful for me.

Saying 'a black color' is redundant; 'black' as an adjective modifies the noun directly (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). 'Helpful for me to having a bike' is ungrammatical: use the gerund 'having a bike is helpful' or an infinitive 'for me to have a bike' (Grammar Problem Type ID 8). Suggestions: use adjective directly and choose correct verb form after 'helpful.'

× It is great for having a bike and grateful for my father also.

✓ I am grateful to my father; having this bike is great.

The original mixes impersonal 'It is great for having a bike' and the adjective 'grateful' without a clear subject or preposition (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'Grateful for my father' is acceptable but better as 'grateful to my father.' Suggestions: make the subject clear ('I am grateful') and separate ideas into clear clauses.

× Umm, I think so, yes, because uh, every teenagers are very crazy with bikes and then, uh, it can be the one of the most, uh, selling point of uh, most of the salesman in the younger stage.

✓ I think so, yes, because many teenagers are very into bikes, and it can be one of the main selling points for sellers targeting young people.

'Every teenagers are' mixes singular 'every' with plural 'teenagers' and should be 'every teenager is' or 'many teenagers are' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1 and 6). 'Selling point of most of the salesman in the younger stage' is awkward; use 'one of the main selling points for sellers targeting young people' for clarity and correct noun phrases. Suggestions: match determiners with noun number and simplify phrasing.

× And then, uh, people are very crazy with bikes because of the movies and then hero, uh, James kind, uh, Bond kind of movies or something.

✓ People are crazy about bikes because of movies and heroes like James Bond.

Use the correct preposition 'crazy about' rather than 'crazy with' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). 'Movies and then hero' is ungrammatical; express 'heroes like James Bond.' Also 'James kind, uh, Bond kind of movies' is redundant—say 'James Bond.' Suggestions: use 'crazy about' and concise references to examples.