Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear, natural and relevant, with a direct topic sentence and supporting details. To improve further, make sentences more concise and vary sentence openings; combine short sentences with linking words to sound smoother and avoid repetition (e.g., avoid repeating 'used to'). Add one specific detail (a memory or feeling) to make the response more vivid.

예시: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My father gave me a large red bike when I was six, and we rode it around the park every Sunday; I remember feeling proud the first time I rode without training wheels.

제안: Your answer addresses the question and gives reasons, but it is disorganized and contains hesitations, repetition, and incomplete sentences. To improve: state a clear topic sentence, then give two well-connected reasons using linking words (Firstly, secondly). Remove filler words (umm) and be specific with examples or brief data (e.g., high temperatures, low cycling infrastructure). Aim for 3–4 concise sentences and use vocabulary like 'prevalent', 'infrastructure', or 'affordable'.

예시: I don't think cycling is very popular among adults in my country. Firstly, the climate is extremely hot for much of the year, which makes long rides uncomfortable. Secondly, cars are relatively affordable and public transport is limited, so most people prefer driving over cycling.

× My father gave it to me when I was 6 or 7 and we used to ride it around the park once a week.

✓ My father gave it to me when I was six or seven, and we used to ride it around the park once a week.

Numbers from one to nine are commonly written as words in formal writing; also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction joining two independent clauses. The original uses digits and omits the comma, which is a punctuation/style issue rather than core grammar; writing 'six or seven' and adding the comma improves clarity and correctness.

× No I don't think it's common, especially for adults.

✓ No, I don't think they're common, especially among adults.

The subject 'bikes' is plural (from the examiner's question), so pronouns and verbs should match plurality. Use 'they're' instead of 'it's' and 'among adults' is more natural than 'for adults.' This fixes subject-pronoun agreement and preposition choice.

× Cars are more common here I think.

✓ Cars are more common here, I think.

This sentence needs a comma to separate the main clause and the tag 'I think.' The grammar is otherwise fine; adding the comma improves readability and reflects natural speech pauses.

× Umm that's because of two reasons.

✓ Umm, that's for two reasons.

Saying 'because of two reasons' is wordy and slightly unidiomatic. 'That's for two reasons' or 'There are two reasons for that' are more natural. Also add a comma after 'Umm' to mark the pause.

× Umm public transportation.

✓ Umm, public transportation is another reason.

The fragment 'Umm public transportation.' lacks a verb and is a sentence fragment. Expanding it into a full clause clarifies meaning and fits the prior sentence listing reasons.

× The sun is unbearable, the heat is UN unbearable. Umm for biking.

✓ The sun is unbearable; the heat is unbearable for biking.

The original repeats 'unbearable' with inconsistent casing and splits phrases into fragments. Combine into a single coherent sentence; use 'for biking' attached to 'heat' rather than as a separate fragment. Also correct casing (UN -> un) and avoid repetition by phrasing succinctly.

× Also cars are much more affordable over here.

✓ Also, cars are much more affordable here.

'Over here' is informal and redundant with 'here.' Use 'here' and add a comma after 'Also' to reflect a natural pause. This corrects preposition usage and improves formality.