Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce grammar errors and make sentences concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and avoid redundancy. Add one specific detail to enrich the answer and use a linking word when giving supporting information.

예시: Yes, I did. My father gave me a bright red bicycle for my tenth birthday, and I used it every day to visit friends and explore the nearby streets. Because it was reliable and easy to ride, I soon knew many routes around my neighborhood.

제안: Improve grammar, use linking words for coherence, and provide specific examples or statistics to support the claim. Use correct plural/singular forms and smoother phrasing. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences and avoid vague phrases like “cycling board.”

예시: Yes, definitely. Bicycles are popular, especially among students and commuters, because they are cheap and often faster than cars in congested areas. For example, many people cycle to university or work, and local shops report that up to 30% of short trips are made by bike in my city.

× Yes, I had to buy when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I bought one when I was a child.

The original sentence uses 'had to buy' which implies obligation rather than a completed action; plus it lacks an object ('one' or 'a bike'). Use simple past 'bought' to describe a completed action in the past and include the object for clarity.

× It was really precious to me because I use it every single day to visit my friends and explore the neighborhoods.

✓ It was really precious to me because I used it every single day to visit my friends and explore the neighborhood.

The context is past (when the speaker was a child), so verbs should be in the past tense. 'Use' should be 'used'. Also 'neighborhoods' can be singular 'neighborhood' to match typical usage; if multiple areas are meant, 'neighborhoods' is acceptable but keep tense consistent.

× Definitely yes.

✓ Definitely, yes.

This is a minor punctuation/phrasing issue rather than a pronoun error; adding a comma improves natural speech representation. If treated as a standalone interjection, a comma makes it flow better.

× Bikes are quite popular in my country because many people, especially students and workers, use for commuting to work or schools.

✓ Bikes are quite popular in my country because many people, especially students and workers, use them for commuting to work or school.

The verb 'use' requires an object; 'them' (referring to bikes) is missing. Also 'schools' as a general noun should be singular 'school' when used after 'to' to indicate purpose, though 'schools' can be used if referring to multiple institutions. Ensure object pronoun and consistent singular/plural after 'to'.

× These are also commonly used for exercise and short trips around the city, which makes cycling board practical and healthy.

✓ Bikes are also commonly used for exercise and short trips around the city, which makes cycling both practical and healthy.

'These' is vague; repeating 'Bikes' clarifies the subject. 'Cycling board' is incorrect and likely a miswrite for 'both' or 'more'; 'both practical and healthy' is the correct idiomatic phrase. The sentence structure needed correction to convey the intended meaning.

× This is cheap, convenient and help avoid traffic.

✓ They are cheap, convenient and help avoid traffic.

The subject should agree with the verb: 'This' is singular but refers to 'bikes' (plural), so use 'They are' not 'This is'. 'Help' is fine with plural subject. Ensure pronoun and verb number agree.