Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and simplify your answer. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, correct grammar (e.g., past tense and correct verb choices), and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. My mother bought me a small bicycle when I was in primary school, and I felt very lucky to have it. Often after school or when I had free time, I would ride it around the neighborhood with my friends, which helped me make close memories and gain confidence.

제안: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with clear reasons and specific examples. Use linking words (however, nowadays, because) and correct phrases (e.g., 'popular in my country', 'two decades ago', 'motor vehicles are predominant'). Avoid hesitations and repeated words, and make sentences grammatically correct and concise.

예시: I think bikes used to be more popular, but nowadays they are less common. Two decades ago many people cycled regularly, especially children and commuters; however, with urban development and the rise of motor vehicles, cars and motorcycles have become the predominant mode of transport, so you see fewer cyclists on the streets now.

× Umm yes, of course I would say that I'm so lucky.

✓ Umm yes, of course I would say that I was so lucky.

The speaker refers to being lucky in the past (childhood), so the verb tense should be past ('was') rather than present ('I'm'). Use past tense to match the time frame of the question about childhood.

× I was so lucky because my mother purchased full me is one of the comical buys when I was a student in in in in in primary school.

✓ I was so lucky because my mother bought me one when I was in primary school.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and contains extra words and repetitions. 'Purchased full me is one of the comical buys' is incorrect. Use 'bought me one' for simplicity and correct verb ('bought' is past tense of 'buy'). Remove repeated filler words and ensure correct word order: subject + verb + object + time phrase.

× I remember that time I immersed the feelings riding by Whenever I have free times or after I finished school times, I immerse myself driving by with my neighbor friends.

✓ I remember that time I enjoyed riding whenever I had free time or after I finished school; I used to ride with my neighbors.

Several issues: 'immersed the feelings riding by' is incorrect; use 'enjoyed riding' or 'felt happy riding'. Tense consistency: referring to past habits, use past tense ('had', 'finished', 'used to ride'). 'Free time' is uncountable singular, not 'free times'. 'Neighbor friends' should be 'neighbors' or 'neighborhood friends'. Also replace awkward 'immerse myself driving by' with 'used to ride' for natural phrasing.

× I think it depends on the errors and around 2 decades ago by you to be popular in my nations.

✓ I think it depends on the area; around two decades ago bicycles used to be popular in my country.

Original has wrong words: 'errors' should be 'area' or 'region'; 'nations' should be 'country'. '2' should be spelled 'two' in formal speech. Use 'used to be popular' to indicate past habitual state. Correct word order and noun choice.

× But right now when I go to the street, it's rarely see the biker, you know, like I think it's because of the the the the developing in society or the the the social cross.

✓ But right now when I go onto the street, I rarely see cyclists; I think it's because of development in society or social changes.

Several problems: 'it's rarely see the biker' has wrong word order and pronoun; correct is 'I rarely see cyclists'. 'Biker' is singular; 'cyclists' fits general reference. Remove repeated filler 'the'. Use 'development in society' or 'social changes' instead of 'the developing in society' and 'social cross'. Also use 'go onto the street' or 'go out on the street'.

× I think like right now vehicle either predominant vehicles in traffic constructions.

✓ I think that right now motor vehicles are the predominant form of transport in traffic.

Original is ungrammatical: 'vehicle either predominant vehicles in traffic constructions' mixes singular/plural and wrong nouns. Use 'motor vehicles are the predominant form of transport' for clarity. 'Traffic constructions' is incorrect; use 'traffic' or 'on the roads'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and proper noun choice.