Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is short and direct but too brief and lacking detail. To improve, start with a clear topic sentence then add 1–2 specific supporting details (e.g., what kind of bike, who gave it to you, how often you rode it, or a short memory). Use a linking word such as "and" or "because" if you add reasons. Keep the whole response under 5 sentences and use slightly more varied vocabulary (e.g., "owned," "used to ride,").

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a red mountain bike that my parents bought me for my eighth birthday, and I used to ride it to school and around the neighborhood almost every day. I remember fixing a flat tire once with my father, which made me more confident about taking care of it.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but is too general and focuses only on older people. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence about overall popularity, then add specific supporting details and a linking word (e.g., "for example," "however") to show nuance — mention who cycles (age groups), reasons for popularity (health, transport), or where people cycle. Use more precise vocabulary like "elderly," "commuters," or "recreational cyclists."

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, not only as a pastime but also as a mode of transport. For example, elderly people often cycle for exercise in parks, while many young people and commuters use bicycles in cities because they are cheap and quick during rush hour.

× Yes, in my country most old people enjoy cycling.

✓ Yes, in my country most older people enjoy cycling.

The phrase 'most old people' is grammatically understandable but uses an adjective order and form that is uncommon and slightly awkward in English. 'Older people' or 'the elderly' are more natural. This is a matter of correct adjective choice and conventional usage rather than strict grammar; replace 'old' with 'older' (or use 'the elderly') to sound natural. Suggestion: use 'older people' or 'the elderly' to refer politely to that age group.