Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use past tense when talking about childhood. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details and a linking word. Avoid unnecessary repetition and keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave me a Yamaha R15 for my 18th birthday, and I was thrilled because it was my first big bike. I used it to commute to college and for weekend rides with friends.

제안: Organize your response: give a clear opinion, then support it with 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Use correct grammar (e.g., ‘used to’ vs ‘start riding at’) and clearer vocabulary (e.g., ‘popular models’). Avoid long, unclear sentences and incorrect phrases.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many young people start riding at around 16 because bikes are affordable and convenient for city traffic. Also, popular models include the Royal Enfield Bullet and various sporty motorcycles, which are commonly seen on the roads.

× Yes, I do like bikes because my father gifted me a bike named R15 on my 18th birthday and I was too happy to get a new bike.

✓ Yes, I like bikes because my father gifted me a bike called R15 for my 18th birthday, and I was very happy to get a new bike.

This sentence mixes present simple 'do like' with a past event 'gifted'. Use simple present 'I like' to state a general preference and keep past tense 'gifted' for the specific event. Also replace 'named' with 'called' and 'on my 18th birthday' with 'for my 18th birthday' for natural collocation; change 'too happy' to 'very happy' which is more appropriate in this context.

× Yes, I do think that bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary in affirmative present simple 'I think'. Remove 'do' for natural, concise English.

× In my country, honestly speaking that children used to ride the bikes at the early age of 16 and they are very keen and trusted riding the bikes and they usually ride.

✓ In my country, to be honest, children usually start riding bikes around the age of 16; they are very keen on and confident about riding them.

Original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect phrases: 'honestly speaking that' is incorrect — use 'to be honest'. 'Used to ride the bikes at the early age of 16' mixes habitual past 'used to' with a general present tendency; use 'usually start riding' for current habit. 'Trusted riding the bikes' is wrong choice of word; use 'confident about riding them' or 'feel confident riding bikes'. Also streamline repetition 'ride' and 'bikes' and use proper preposition 'keen on'. Use a semicolon or separate clauses for clarity.

× I think sports bike and the famous bike popular is a bullet in my country it's not.

✓ I think sport bikes are popular, and the most famous bike in my country is the Bullet.

Original has multiple problems: 'sports bike' should be plural 'sport bikes' when speaking generally. Word order 'famous bike popular is a bullet' is incorrect; rephrase to 'the most famous bike... is the Bullet.' Also separate sentences or use conjunctions; capitalize model name 'Bullet' as a proper noun. Ensure agreement between subject and verb.