Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy, fluency and coherence. Give a clear direct topic sentence, then one or two supporting details using correct tense and reduced hesitation. Use past tense for childhood, avoid repetitions, and link ideas briefly (e.g., "so" or "because").

예시: Yes, I did. My mother gave me a bicycle when I was seven as a birthday present, and I used to ride it to school and around the neighborhood every day.

제안: Focus on grammatical accuracy, vocabulary choice and concise structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Correct noun/verb agreement and use slightly more precise vocabulary (e.g., "construction workers", "an inexpensive and convenient" -> "inexpensive and a convenient").

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because many people, especially construction workers and other laborers, use them to commute. They are inexpensive and convenient for getting through congested urban areas, so you often see crowds of cyclists during rush hour.

× Yes I have and my mother Give give.

✓ Yes, I had one and my mother gave it to me.

The examiner asked about the past (when you were a child), so the student should use past tense. 'Have' is present; 'Give give' is incorrect repetition and wrong verb form. Use past simple 'had' and 'gave'. Also add commas for clarity.

× Give me a uh, give me a bike. Ask a gift for me.

✓ She gave me a bike as a gift.

The original contains spoken disfluencies and incorrect structure 'Ask a gift for me'. Recast as a single past-tense sentence: 'She gave me a bike as a gift.' This fixes sentence structure and fits the past context.

× Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many commuters, particularly constructions workers and other laborers, use them to get to work.

✓ Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many commuters, particularly construction workers and other laborers, use them to get to work.

'Constructions workers' is incorrect plural noun form; correct is 'construction workers'. This is a subject-noun form error. Also 'commuters' and 'use' agree correctly; only the noun needed correction.

× There are an inexpensive and convenient way to travel in congested urban areas, so you see them everywhere during rush hour.

✓ They are an inexpensive and convenient way to travel in congested urban areas, so you see them everywhere during rush hour.

The sentence starts with 'There are' which mismatches the singular noun phrase 'an inexpensive and convenient way'. Change to 'They are' to match the plural subject 'bicycles' (they), or rephrase to 'It is an inexpensive and convenient way' referring to 'bicycling'. Using 'There are an...' is grammatically incorrect due to article and number mismatch.