Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, structure and fluency. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give 2–3 specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "however"). Avoid repetition, filler words ("uh", "and"), and long, tangled phrases. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "commute", "congested", "suburbs") and keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes — it depends on the city. In large, congested cities many people commute by bike because traffic is heavy and cycling is faster; for example, in downtown areas you often see bike lanes and bike-sharing schemes. However, in suburban or rural areas bicycles are less common because distances are longer and public transport is limited.

× Actually depends on the city that you live in, because in some cities, because of the traffic's real popular and people cycling to, for example, go to a workout school to shopping and, and some places like this, but in some places aren't, uh, popular because, uh, for example.

✓ It actually depends on the city you live in. In some cities, because traffic is heavy, cycling is really popular and people cycle to go to work, school, or shopping, but in other places it isn't popular.

The original utterance contains multiple sentence structure problems: missing subject in the first clause, redundant and disfluent 'because' phrases, incorrect noun phrase 'traffic's real popular', incorrect verb forms 'people cycling to' without a finite verb, and a fragment 'some places aren't... for example'. Suggestion: break the long run-on into clearer sentences, supply missing subjects and verbs ('It depends', 'traffic is heavy', 'people cycle'), use appropriate adjectives/adverbs ('really popular'), and provide parallel infinitive phrases ('to go to work, school, or shopping'). Also remove filler words ('uh', 'for example') for clarity.