Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I did), then give one or two specific supporting details: who owned it, why you couldn't ride it, and how you felt. Avoid filler words and grammar mistakes (use past forms and correct noun/verb agreement). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. My aunt bought the bike for me, but she didn’t allow me to ride it because she believed it was against our family tradition for girls to cycle. As a result, I rarely used it and felt disappointed.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then provide two specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and vague phrases. Use countable/uncountable agreement (e.g., 'most people', 'they don't cost as much as cars'). Add a brief example or result to make your answer more concrete.

예시: Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in my country because they are reliable and much cheaper to buy and maintain than cars. For example, many people commute to work by bike to avoid traffic and save money on fuel and parking.

× Yes I had one but I wasn't allowed to use it cause according to my aunt, uh, it's against the tradition for a girl to bikes so.

✓ Yes, I had one, but I wasn't allowed to use it because, according to my aunt, it's against the tradition for a girl to ride a bike.

The main tense is past and was used correctly ('had', 'wasn't allowed'). Errors corrected: 'cause' -> 'because' (informal to standard), 'to bikes' is grammatically incorrect: after 'to' (infinitive marker) use base verb 'ride' and singular 'a bike' not plural. Also added commas for clarity. Suggestion: use complete infinitive 'to ride a bike' and prefer 'because' in formal speech.

× So I don't know if you use it.

✓ So I don't know if you used it.

The context is past (childhood), so the verb should be in past tense 'used' to match 'I had' earlier. Using present 'use' creates a time mismatch. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent with time references.

× Yes, definitely. They are popular in my country and most of people they are using it because of their reliability, because of their reliability and because and also they doesn't cost like cars.

✓ Yes, definitely. They are popular in my country, and most people use them because of their reliability and because they don't cost as much as cars.

Multiple issues corrected under pronoun and agreement: 'most of people' should be 'most people' (no 'of'), avoid redundant subject 'they' after 'most people'. 'they are using it' -> 'use them' matches plural 'bikes' and is simpler. 'because of their reliability' was repeated so remove duplicate. 'they doesn't' is subject-verb agreement error; correct 'they don't'. 'cost like cars' is unnatural; use 'cost as much as cars'. Also maintain plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'bikes'. Suggestion: avoid redundant words, ensure pronouns agree in number, and use natural comparative phrases.

× So it's like it's for cars management and also.

✓ So it's more practical for getting around than using cars.

Original sentence is incomplete and unclear ('for cars management' is ungrammatical). Rewrote to convey likely intended meaning: bikes are more practical for transportation compared with cars. Suggestion: express complete idea with a clear subject, verb, and object; avoid vague phrases like 'cars management.'