Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, concise, and include a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words. For example, state you did not have a bike, give a specific reason (fear or family circumstances), and add a brief example or consequence. Keep the answer to no more than five sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was afraid of falling. As a result, my parents preferred I learn to ride a scooter first, so I only started cycling briefly at age twelve under supervision.

제안: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word or two (e.g., "because", "however"). Reduce hesitations and repetition by planning a short structure: opinion + two reasons or an example. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "taxis", "public transport", "cycling infrastructure").

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because public transport is affordable and cities lack safe cycling lanes. For example, most people choose taxis or buses for convenience and safety, so few commute by bicycle.

× A child. Actually, no, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I am so afraid.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have a bike because I was very afraid of them.

The original sentence contains a pronoun/reference issue and tense mismatch. 'A child.' is unnecessary and awkward; combine into one sentence. 'I am so afraid' uses present tense but the context is past, so change to past tense 'I was'. Also 'afraid' needs an object: 'afraid of them' (referring to bikes) or 'afraid to ride one'. Use clearer reference to avoid pronoun ambiguity and ensure tense consistency. Grammar problem type ID:12

× I don't like it and I don't like, I don't like it. Umm.

✓ I didn't like them and I didn't want to ride one.

The original repeats phrases and mixes present with past. The context is childhood, so use past tense 'didn't like'. Also replace the vague 'it' with clearer references: 'them' (bikes) and 'ride one'. This fixes redundancy and clarifies meaning. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Uh, to be honest, to know, the bike is not uh, popular in my country.

✓ To be honest, bikes are not very popular in my country.

Use plural 'bikes' rather than singular 'the bike' when talking generally. Also use plural verb 'are'. Remove unnecessary filler 'to know'. This corrects pronoun/number reference and generalization. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Uh, many people, many people prefer, uh, prefer to take taxi uh, more than, uh, by uh.

✓ Many people prefer to take taxis rather than ride bikes.

Use plural 'taxis' for general statement and 'rather than' to compare choices. Replace vague 'by' with 'ride bikes' to clarify the alternative. This corrects pronoun/number use and preposition/comparison structure. Grammar problem type ID:11