Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "rode my bike" and "cycle" convey the same idea). Also use slightly more varied vocabulary (e.g., "ride around the neighborhood") and keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes — I had a bike as a child. I usually rode it to my neighbour’s house to invite my friend to play, and in the afternoons I would ride around the neighbourhood for exercise and fun.

제안: Give a clear direct answer first, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Avoid filler sounds like "uh" and unclear phrases. Use linking words (for example, because, for instance, moreover) and correct grammar (e.g., "I often use a bike to go to the market").

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For instance, many people use bikes to go to local markets or short commutes, especially in crowded city areas where parking is difficult.

× I often rode my bike to the neighbor's house to ask the girl next door to play with me, and I would cycle around the street every afternoon.

✓ I often rode my bike to my neighbor's house to ask the girl next door to play with me, and I cycled around the street every afternoon.

The original sentence mixes past simple ('rode') with conditional-like 'would' used for habitual past. While 'would' can express past habitual actions, using it together with past simple 'rode' and 'every afternoon' creates inconsistency. Additionally, 'the neighbor's house' is awkward; 'my neighbor's house' is more natural. Suggest using consistent past simple verbs ('rode' and 'cycled') for past habitual actions. Use 'my neighbor's house' for clarity.

× Yeah, uh, because it's very convenient.

✓ Yeah, because they are very convenient.

The examiner asked about 'bikes' (plural). The student replied with 'it's', a singular pronoun, which does not agree with the plural noun. Replace 'it's' with 'they are' (or 'they're') to match the plural subject 'bikes.' Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× I rode back to market supermarkets, uh, usually and the it's all around the bikes.

✓ I usually rode my bike back from the market, and bicycles are everywhere.

The original sentence has multiple structural problems: incorrect word order ('rode back to market supermarkets'), unnecessary fillers ('uh'), and an ungrammatical phrase ('the it's all around the bikes'). Correct by placing adverb 'usually' before the verb phrase, using 'rode my bike back from the market' for clarity, and expressing the general observation as 'bicycles are everywhere.' This resolves word order, article and pronoun issues and makes the meaning clear.