Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct small errors (e.g., 'four wheels' → 'training wheels' or 'with training wheels'), and add one specific detail about why the memory is special. Keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain.

예시: Yes. When I was eleven my parents bought me a small pink bike with training wheels, and I still have it. I loved riding it in the park because my parents would come with me every weekend, which made those outings feel special. That memory is one of my happiest childhood moments.

제안: Avoid inaccurate facts and unclear phrasing. Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then support it with accurate, specific reasons and linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Replace vague expressions like 'classic line' and correct numbers. Mention one clear example such as bike-sharing schemes to illustrate popularity.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, bike-sharing schemes launched a few years ago made cycling even more common in cities, as people can rent bikes with a smartphone app. As a result, many people use bikes for commuting and short errands.

× 'there are over 12 billion people in China can ride a bike.'

✓ 'there are over 1.2 billion people in China who can ride a bike.'

'12 billion' is incorrect because China’s population is about 1.2 billion; more importantly, the sentence mixes clauses without a relative pronoun. Use the plural count correctly and add the relative pronoun who to link the clause. Also correct the numeric magnitude from 12 billion to 1.2 billion to be realistic (if the student meant all people). Suggestion: use 'there are over 1.2 billion people in China who can ride a bike.'

× 'It's really cute and I still keep it right now.'

✓ 'It's really cute and I still have it.'

'keep' in this context is not the natural simple present stative verb; native speakers use 'have' to indicate possession of a childhood object. Also 'right now' is redundant with 'still'; use 'still have it' for a clear present-state meaning.

× 'Uh, maybe the wonderful moment with my parents.'

✓ 'Uh, maybe it was a wonderful moment with my parents.'

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb. Adding 'it was' completes the sentence and fits the past-reflective meaning. Suggestion: include a linking verb to form a complete sentence.

× 'And you know, years before we have conducted one we called sharing bike.'

✓ 'And you know, years ago we introduced something we called a sharing bike.'

'years before' is nonstandard; use 'years ago' for past time reference. The present perfect 'have conducted' is incorrect here for a past specific event; simple past 'introduced' or 'had' is appropriate. Word order is awkward; rephrase to 'we introduced something we called a sharing bike.' Also add the article 'a' before 'sharing bike.'

× 'we called sharing bike.'

✓ 'we called a sharing bike.'

Countable singular noun 'sharing bike' requires an article. Use 'a sharing bike' or 'the sharing bike' depending on context. In this generic introduction, 'a' is correct.

× 'Do you think bikes are popular in your country?'

✓ 'Do you think bikes are popular in your country?'

This sentence is actually correct; no change needed. Included here only to confirm there is no preposition error. (No correction necessary.)

× 'And I remember there's a classic line like there are over 12 billion people in China can ride a bike.'

✓ 'And I remember a classic saying: there are over 1.2 billion people in China who can ride a bike.'

The original mixes two clauses and misplaces 'there's' and 'there are' leading to awkward structure. Remove redundant contractions and use a colon or 'that' to introduce the quotation. Add 'who' to connect relative clause. Also correct population figure as noted.+' '