Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: แก้ไขข้อผิดไวยากรณ์และโครงสร้างประโยคให้เป็นปัจจุบัน/อดีตอย่างถูกต้อง และลดคำอึกอัก (um/uh) ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคหลักที่ชัดเจนแล้วตามด้วยเหตุผลอย่างสั้น ๆ โดยใช้คำเชื่อม прост เช่น because หรือ so เพื่อความลื่นไหล ตัวอย่างข้อควรปรับ: ใช้รูปอดีต (didn't have, didn't want), ใช้สรรพนามและกริยาให้ตรง (he was worried), และหลีกเลี่ยงการซ้ำคำ

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my father didn’t want me to ride. He was worried it was too dangerous, so I usually walked or used public transport instead.

제안: ปรับความชัดเจนและความสมเหตุสมผลของเนื้อหา แสดงเหตุผลที่ชัดเจนและให้รายละเอียดเป็นรูปธรรม ใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น because, for example, and also และแก้ประโยคที่ไม่สมบูรณ์ (subject-verb agreement) หลีกเลี่ยงข้อมูลไม่ชัดเจนหรือคำพูดที่ไม่เข้าใจ เช่น “can 6 sack” ให้เปลี่ยนเป็นตัวอย่างที่ชัดเจน เช่น จำนวนจักรยานหรือเหตุผลว่าทำไมคนใช้จักรยานมาก

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to go to the market or commute to work, and there are dedicated bike lanes in many cities.

× No, I don't have a bike when our a shop because my father don't want me to bike when I was young.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my father didn't want me to ride one when I was young.

Use past tense for past events: 'didn't have' and 'didn't want'. Replace incorrect pronouns and phrases: 'our a shop' is wrong; context indicates childhood so use 'I was a child'. Use correct verb for riding a bicycle: 'ride' instead of 'bike'. Also match subject and verb in past: 'didn't'. Improve word order and clarity.

× He he worry about uh, careful about uh, it's too dangerous.

✓ He was worried and careful because he thought it was too dangerous.

Use past tense and correct third person form: 'was worried' (not 'worry'). Combine ideas clearly: 'worried and careful' and use 'thought it was' to refer to his opinion. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct tense.

× Yes, in my country bike is very popular because it's comfortable for living.

✓ Yes, in my country bicycles are very popular because they are convenient for getting around.

Use plural 'bicycles' or 'bikes' when speaking generally and match verb 'are'. 'It's comfortable for living' is unnatural; use 'convenient for getting around'. Also ensure pronoun agreement: 'they are'.

× In this country is has a lot of bike.

✓ In this country there are a lot of bikes.

Use 'there are' to state existence and plural noun 'bikes' to match 'a lot of'. Remove incorrect 'is has'. This fixes word order and verb usage.

× In my country is can 6 sack.

✓ In my country, there can be six types/models (or 'six million bikes' if you mean quantity).

Original is unclear: '6 sack' is incorrect. Choose appropriate quantifier and noun. If you meant 'six types' use 'six types/models'; if you meant quantity use a number with a countable noun like 'six million bikes'. Ensure verb structure 'there can be' for possibility or 'there are' for factual count.