Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a direct topic sentence, then briefly add one or two supporting details (e.g., what the bike looked like or how you used it). Use correct articles and simpler phrasing to avoid awkwardness.

예시: Yes. I got my first bike when I was seven; my father gave it to me as a birthday present. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I rode it around the neighborhood every afternoon.

제안: Organize your points and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to list reasons (for example, because, firstly, secondly). Use concise, correct phrases (e.g., "inexpensive," "easy to use in traffic," "widely available"). Reduce filler words and repeat-check grammar (articles, singular/plural).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient in heavy traffic. For example, many people use motorcycles or scooters to commute short distances, and they are widely available with few legal restrictions.

× At the age of 7 I had a bike which was gifted by my father.

✓ At the age of 7, I had a bike that my father gifted me.

The original sentence mostly conveys past time correctly but is slightly awkward in phrasing. Change 'which was gifted by my father' to the active and more natural 'that my father gifted me.' Also add a comma after the introductory phrase 'At the age of 7' for correct punctuation. This improves clarity and naturalness while keeping the past tense. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Yes, uh, bikes are very much popular in our country as they are one of the means of transportation is means of transportation having a less cost cutting, easy to move in a a traffic area and and it it is readily available and there is no restriction and no limitation on bike ride.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country because they are an inexpensive means of transportation, easy to use in traffic, readily available, and there are few restrictions on riding them.

The original sentence contains multiple structural problems: repetition, redundant phrases, awkward noun phrases, and incorrect word order. Break the ideas into a clear list joined by commas and conjunctions. Replace 'very much popular' with 'very popular' (natural adjective usage), 'means of transportation is means of transportation' with 'an inexpensive means of transportation', and 'having a less cost cutting' with 'inexpensive'. Change 'easy to move in a a traffic area' to 'easy to use in traffic' and remove duplicated words. Use 'there are few restrictions on riding them' to convey 'no restriction and no limitation' more naturally and grammatically. These changes correct sentence structure and improve readability while preserving meaning. Grammar problem type ID: 26