Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify unclear phrases, correct grammar, and make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear expressions like "the eight of seven" and "most factors."

예시: Yes, I had a bike from around the age of seven, and I rode it to school every day during primary school. It was a practical way to get to class quickly, and it also gave me some exercise and a chance to enjoy the fresh air before lessons.

제안: Tighten wording and correct unnatural phrases (e.g., "convenient in business"). Provide one or two concrete examples and use linking words to connect ideas. Use varied vocabulary like "commute," "affordable," or "environmentally friendly."

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially among young people, because cycling is healthy and lets people enjoy fresh air. For example, many students and office workers cycle short distances to save money and avoid traffic, and cycling is also seen as an affordable and environmentally friendly way to travel.

× I had a bike from about the eight of seven and I brought it to school every day during primary school.

✓ I had a bike from about the age of seven and I brought it to school every day during primary school.

The phrase 'the eight of seven' is incorrect and likely intended to express age. This is a singular/plural and word choice issue: 'age' is required after a number when stating how old someone was (singular noun). Use 'the age of seven' or simply 'aged seven' to be natural and grammatically correct. Suggestion: say 'from about the age of seven' or 'from about seven years old.'

× It helped me get to school most factors and was a fun way to get some exercise and enjoy the fresh air before lessons.

✓ It helped me get to school most days and was a fun way to get some exercise and enjoy the fresh air before lessons.

The phrase 'most factors' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'most days.' This is a quantifier/word choice error. Replace 'factors' with the correct noun 'days' to quantify frequency. Suggestion: use 'most days' or 'almost every day.'

× Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country, especially among young people, because cycling is healthy and allows people to enjoy fresh air.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country, especially among young people, because cycling is healthy and allows people to enjoy the fresh air.

The phrase 'enjoy fresh air' is acceptable, but English commonly uses the definite article 'the' with 'fresh air' when speaking generally about the air in a place. This is an article/preposition usage nuance. Suggestion: use 'the fresh air' for natural phrasing in this context.

× Many students and office workers also use bicycles for short commutes since they are inexpensive and convenient in business.

✓ Many students and office workers also use bicycles for short commutes since they are inexpensive and convenient for getting around in the city.

The phrase 'convenient in business' is awkward and incorrect: 'in' plus 'business' does not convey commuting convenience. This is a preposition and word choice error. Better options: 'convenient for commuting,' 'convenient for getting around,' or 'convenient in urban areas.' Suggestion: use 'convenient for commuting' or 'convenient for getting around the city.'