Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary words. For example, use past simple correctly (had, bought) and add a reason or memory to make the answer more engaging.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was in elementary school, and it was a second‑hand bike but very sturdy. I loved riding it around the neighborhood because it gave me a lot of freedom and helped me make friends.

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise. Begin with a direct opinion, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, so, therefore). Use correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g. "during the COVID‑19 pandemic", "healthier").

예시: Yes, bicycles have become quite popular in my country, especially during the COVID‑19 pandemic. People used bikes to avoid crowded public transport and to exercise more, so many cities saw an increase in cycling for both health and safety reasons.

× I had one bike when I was a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

Use the indefinite article 'a' with a singular countable noun instead of 'one' in this context. 'One bike' is grammatically possible but sounds unnatural; 'a bike' is more idiomatic.

× It bike about by my father's when I was in an elementary school.

✓ It was bought by my father when I was in elementary school.

This sentence has multiple issues: wrong word order, incorrect verb form, and incorrect article use. The passive voice requires the past participle 'bought' and the auxiliary 'was'. 'By my father' indicates the agent. Use 'elementary school' without 'an' when referring to general grade level. Reformulating clarifies meaning.

× I really like that bike even though it bike gets a second hand bike that my father ever bulked.

✓ I really liked that bike, even though it was a secondhand bike that my father had bought.

Several errors: tense consistency (past 'liked' since referring to childhood), redundant words and wrong verb forms. Use past passive 'was' + adjective 'secondhand' (one word) and past perfect or simple past 'had bought' or 'bought' for the action before or during that time. 'Bulked' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'bought'.

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

✓ Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

This sentence is correct. 'Bikes' plural is appropriate when asking about general popularity.

× The bike is popular in my country especially in a COVID-19 pandemic because people realize about the healthier body and as a biker is the one that it make the body healthier.

✓ Bicycles became more popular in my country, especially during the COVID-19 pandemic, because people became more aware of healthier lifestyles and cycling helps make the body healthier.

Multiple article and word-choice issues: use general plural 'bicycles' or 'bikes' instead of 'the bike'. Use 'during the COVID-19 pandemic' not 'in a'. 'Realize about' is incorrect; use 'became more aware of'. 'As a biker is the one that it make the body healthier' is ungrammatical—rephrase to state the idea clearly: 'cycling helps make the body healthier'. Also adjust tense to past (became) to match pandemic time frame.