Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb choices and sentence boundaries, and avoid filler words. Use one or two supporting details linked logically (use linking words like “and” or “which”) and keep to a maximum of 4–5 sentences. Be specific (e.g. where you rode, how you felt) and correct mistakes like “writing” → “riding” and “There is still” → “It still had”.

예시: I had my first bike when I was seven. It still had training wheels, and my mother helped me practice in our driveway. That first ride was a fond memory because I felt proud and confident, which made me believe I could learn new things quickly.

제안: Make the answer more structured and cohesive. Begin with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give two specific supporting points using linking words (e.g. “however”, “for example”). Avoid short fragmented sentences and repeat words. Provide a concise conclusion or opinion. Use specific examples (cities with bike lanes, initiatives) if possible.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in the Philippines, especially in urban areas. For example, many cities have designated bike lanes and community cycling groups, but these lanes are often poorly enforced, and cars sometimes occupy them. Nevertheless, cycling is promoted as a healthy, affordable way to commute and exercise.

× Yes, I remember writing my first bike when I was seven years old.

✓ Yes, I remember riding my first bike when I was seven years old.

The verb 'write' is incorrect here; the intended action is 'ride'. This is a word choice error affecting verb meaning, so replace 'writing' with 'riding'. Use verbs that match the activity described. Suggestion: Learn common collocations (e.g., ride a bike, write a letter) and check verbs that go with specific nouns.

× There is still training wheels on it and it was, uh, with my mom.

✓ There were still training wheels on it and my mom was with me.

Use plural agreement with 'training wheels' after 'there' so 'there were' is required (past tense). Also 'with my mom' is awkwardly placed; clearer: 'my mom was with me.' Suggestion: Match 'there is/there are' to singular/plural and tense: 'there was'/'there were' for past; place the actor after the verb for clarity.

× When I first tried riding the bicycle.

✓ When I first tried riding the bicycle, I felt nervous but excited.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a main clause. 'When I first tried...' is a dependent clause and must be followed by an independent clause to complete the thought. Suggestion: Combine the subordinate clause with a main clause: 'When I first tried riding the bicycle, I fell' or similar.

× It was a fond memory.

✓ It was a fond memory for me.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable but adding 'for me' clarifies perspective and makes the sentence more natural in context. If analyzing problem types, this is a sentence structure/pronoun clarity issue. Suggestion: Add a clarifying phrase when referring to personal experiences: 'for me' or 'to me'.

× I really enjoyed it and it was that moment when I thought I can do everything.

✓ I really enjoyed it and it was at that moment when I thought I could do anything.

The second clause mixes past narration with present 'can'. In past narrative, use past ability 'could' and 'anything' is more natural than 'everything' here. Also 'at that moment' is the correct phrase. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent in past narratives: use past simple or past modals (could, would) after past time markers.

× We have bike lanes.

✓ We have bike lanes.

This sentence is correct. 'Bike lanes' is plural and matches the plural noun; no change needed. Included for completeness.

× However, it is not well implemented as cars often take over the bike lanes.

✓ However, they are not well implemented because cars often take over the bike lanes.

'It' is unclear when referring to 'bike lanes' (plural); use 'they'. Also 'as' can be used but 'because' is clearer. Ensure pronoun agrees with plural noun. Suggestion: Match pronouns to their antecedents in number: 'they' for plural 'bike lanes'.

× But it is highly encouraged in our country to use bikes as a form of exercise to allow people to move regularly.

✓ But cycling is highly encouraged in our country as a form of exercise to help people stay active regularly.

'It is highly encouraged to use bikes' is grammatical but wordy; 'cycling is highly encouraged' is more natural. 'Move regularly' is awkward; 'stay active' or 'exercise regularly' is better. This fixes article/word choice and clarity. Suggestion: Prefer concise, natural phrases: 'cycling' or 'riding bicycles' and use 'stay active' for regular physical activity.