Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details. Correct verb forms and possessive structures, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like “because” or “when” to connect ideas.

예시: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child because my father gave it to me for my seventh birthday. I loved riding it around the neighborhood and practiced balancing and turning every day, which helped me become more confident on the road.

제안: Work on organizing ideas clearly, using correct grammar and precise statistics. Begin with a direct opinion, then support it with a clear reason and an example. Use linking words (for example, moreover, because) and avoid vague or incorrect phrases like “they were 18% the people.”

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in Pakistan, especially in Karachi, because they are affordable and easy to park. For example, about 18% of commuters in some areas use motorcycles to get to work, and many people from lower-income families prefer bikes as a cost-effective option.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It my father's gift me my seven-year birthday, so I always like to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was my father's gift to me for my seventh birthday, so I always liked to ride it.

IDs: 5 and 6 apply, but only 5 (Past tense issue) is reported per instructions. The original contains incorrect verb forms and tense consistency. 'It my father's gift me my seven-year birthday' is missing the verb 'was' and the preposition 'to', and 'seven-year' should be 'seventh' (ordinal). Also 'I always like' should match past reference 'when I was a child', so change to 'I always liked'. Suggestion: include the verb 'was', use 'gift to me' for correct object phrasing, use ordinal 'seventh birthday', and keep past tense throughout when referring to past habits.

× Since I believe that the bikes are the most used transport in my country, especially in my city Karachi, they were 18% the people are traveling through the bikes and bikes are the most very popular in my country. So a lot of people are there belongs to their class friendly. So they prefer to ride bike because bike is economic right?

✓ I believe that bicycles are the most commonly used form of transport in my country, especially in my city Karachi. Around 18% of people travel by bicycle, and bicycles are very popular. Many people use them because they are affordable.

ID 6 (Present tense issue) is applied. The original has multiple problems: unnatural tense and word order, incorrect use of 'the bikes', 'they were 18% the people are traveling through the bikes', incorrect noun forms and articles, and awkward clauses like 'people are there belongs to their class friendly'. Corrections: use 'I believe' for current opinion; 'bicycles' is a better general noun; 'most commonly used form of transport' is clearer; express statistics as 'Around 18% of people travel by bicycle'; replace 'most very popular' with 'very popular'; 'many people use them because they are affordable' conveys 'economic' meaning. Suggestion: keep present simple for general facts, use correct noun forms ('bicycle' vs 'bikes'), use 'travel by' for transport, and simplify sentences for clarity.