Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and grammar: respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence in past tense (e.g. “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.”). Avoid repeating the examiner’s question and correct word order errors. Keep the answer concise (1–2 sentences) and, if needed, add one brief supporting detail using a linking word (for example, “because” or “so”) to explain why the bike was important.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I used it every day after school because it let me visit my friends and play in the park.

제안: Make the answer natural, grammatical, and specific: start with a clear opinion sentence (e.g. “Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country.”). Use linking words like “for example” or “because” to introduce a specific reason or example. Correct word choice and collocations (e.g. “commute by bike,” “avoid traffic”) and avoid filler words such as “umm.” Limit to up to 3 sentences and provide one precise supporting detail about who cycles and why.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many office workers, including people from human resources, commute by bike to avoid heavy traffic and save money on transport.

× Did you have a bike when you had you were kid?

✓ Did you have a bike when you were a child?

The original sentence contains extra words and incorrect word order ('had you were kid'). This is a sentence structure error: remove the redundant 'had you' and use the correct noun phrase 'a child'. Use 'were' with 'you' and the noun 'child' rather than 'kid' for more natural phrasing. Suggestion: simplify the clause to 'when you were a child'.

× Yes pass the call of very popular in my country umm for example many office workers including people in HR depart department still write their old bikes to work to avoid traffics and.

✓ Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, many office workers, including people in the HR department, still ride their old bikes to work to avoid traffic.

This sentence has multiple problems; the primary grammar issues are incorrect prepositions/verbs and incorrect noun forms. 'Pass the call of' is meaningless and was replaced with 'bicycles are very popular'. 'Depart department' is a duplication; use 'the HR department'. The verb 'write' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'ride' when using a bike. Use the preposition 'to work' and the uncountable noun 'traffic' (not 'traffics'). Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'ride' for bicycles, 'the HR department', and 'traffic' as an uncountable noun.