Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Remove filler words (umm, uh) and avoid grammatical errors like mixing tenses and awkward phrases. Aim for 2–3 concise sentences and use linking words if adding details (for example, "and" or "which").

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was green and black, and I remember riding it to the park every weekend because it was light and easy to handle.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons or examples. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words (for example, "because", "for example", "also") to connect your opinion and reasons. Keep answers to 2–3 sentences and use accurate grammar (e.g., "children" not "child").

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many children learn to ride them at a young age for fun and exercise. For example, most neighborhoods have safe cycling paths and parents often teach their kids to ride on weekends.

× Umm, yes, of course I do have a bike when I'm as a child and I remember it clearly.

✓ Umm, yes, of course I had a bike when I was a child and I remember it clearly.

The sentence mixes present tense ('do have', 'I'm') with a past time frame ('when ... a child'). Use past tense to match the time reference: 'had' and 'was'. Also remove the extra word 'as'. Suggestion: use 'I had' and 'I was' for past situations.

× It was green and black and it was a wonderful.

✓ It was green and black and it was wonderful.

The adjective 'wonderful' does not need the indefinite article 'a' when used predicatively before a full stop. 'It was a wonderful' is incomplete (needs a noun, e.g., 'a bike'). Either remove 'a' or add a noun: 'it was wonderful' or 'it was a wonderful bike'.

× Umm, totally. Yes, bikes are totally popular since, umm, every, every child is.

✓ Umm, totally. Yes, bikes are definitely popular since almost every child has one.

The clause 'every, every child is' is incomplete and incorrectly uses 'is' where possession is meant. Use 'has' to show possession. Also 'since' with a statement of prevalence is better followed by a clause like 'almost every child has one'. Replace filler words and repeatings.

× I don't know, maybe it's just a umm, uh, maybe it's just a hobby that every child has to has to learn how to bike because it's, I don't know, maybe it's necessary.

✓ I don't know, maybe it's just a hobby that every child has to learn, to know how to ride a bike, because it's, I don't know, maybe necessary.

Problems: repetition ('has to has to') and incorrect verb 'bike' used as verb; 'ride a bike' is the correct collocation. The phrase 'has to learn how to ride a bike' uses the base verb after 'has to'. Also avoid repeating 'maybe' excessively. Suggestion: say 'has to learn how to ride a bike' or 'needs to learn to ride a bike'.