Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar, start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix tense and sentence structure and avoid redundancy. For example, join short fragments and correct prepositions (e.g., "around my neighborhood" not "just my neighborhood").

예시: Yes. My mother bought me a bike when I was a child, and I used it to ride around my neighborhood. For example, I often cycled to my friends’ houses to play with them because many of them had bikes too.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific and grammatical reasons. Use linking words (However, nowadays) to show contrast and avoid filler words like "uh." Be specific about what alternatives have emerged.

예시: Yes, bikes used to be very popular in my country because many people relied on them for short trips to markets, work, or friends’ homes. However, nowadays their use has declined somewhat due to more affordable motorbikes and improved public transport, which are faster for longer commutes.

× When I was a child, yes my mom bought me a bike and I used that to roam around my city.

✓ When I was a child, yes, my mom bought me a bike and I used it to roam around my city.

Replace 'that' with the correct pronoun 'it' to refer to the bike; also add a comma after 'yes' for clarity. The issue is choice of pronoun within past-tense narrative (use 'it' for objects). Ensure pronoun agrees with the referenced noun and the past-tense context remains consistent.

× I usually just my neighborhood.

✓ I usually just roamed my neighborhood.

The original sentence is missing a verb; this is a sentence structure error. In past habitual context, use 'roamed' to match 'When I was a child' and 'used' earlier. Alternatively, 'I usually just stayed in my neighborhood' could be used depending on meaning. Ensure a verb is present and tense matches the narrative.

× I used to go to my friend's house to have fun with them because they also have a bike.

✓ I used to go to my friends' houses to have fun with them because they also had bikes.

Pluralize possessive and nouns consistently: if visiting multiple friends, use 'friends' and plural possessive 'friends''; change 'have' and 'a bike' to past tense 'had' and plural 'bikes' to match past-tense narrative and agreement. If referring to one friend, use 'my friend's house' and 'he/she also had a bike.' Ensure subject-verb tense agreement and consistency.

× Yeah, during my time it was really popular.

✓ Yeah, during my time it was really popular.

This sentence is acceptable grammatically for past-time reference; no correction needed. It uses past tense 'was' correctly to describe popularity in the past.

× Uh, most of the people use it to go to the city, to go to groceries, to go to different houses.

✓ Uh, most people used it to go to the city, to go grocery shopping, and to visit different houses.

Remove 'of' after 'most' ('most people' is correct), change verbs to past tense 'used' to match the time frame, replace 'to go to groceries' with the correct collocation 'to go grocery shopping', and use parallel structure: 'to go to the city, to go grocery shopping, and to visit different houses.' This fixes quantifier misuse and improves verb form and collocation.

× But As for now, as the time revolves and new transportations have been currently evolving.

✓ But as for now, times have changed and new modes of transportation have evolved.

Fix capitalization ('As' should be lowercase), remove unnecessary words ('as the time revolves' is awkward), and correct noun and verb forms: 'transportations' is uncountable/rare; use 'modes of transportation' or 'transportation options.' 'Have been currently evolving' is redundant; use 'have evolved' or 'are evolving.' This addresses sentence structure, word choice, and tense consistency for present reference.